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    dots Submission Name: I love youdots

    Author: deathbelow
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 34/43/17
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This poem was actually because someone told me that they loved me and I wasnt sure what to say back...Its a hard thing expecially when you dont know what love is...

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    dotsI love youdots

    Tragedy with a broken heart,
    On tangled and dusty roads
    The tormented thorns bite away
    As they remind me of an unfortunate day
    Where there are seas of red blood
    So vile with contempt
    For the last words spoken are the last I ever dreamt
    Buckets of salty tears
    That float away on distant lullabies
    And hear, only here, the ones who cry
    The cloudless fortune of the darkening sky
    Repents the only sins
    And these awful words are only where it begins
    Who ever thoght that into the depths of hell you would decend
    Blazing glory,
    It seems to never end
    And they course through my viens
    Deep and silent twitch
    And I take them as you say "Your little Bitch"
    The sound echos and tears at my skin
    This wretched monster always wins
    Its claws are after you too
    Who knew,
    These three words were only,

    Submitted on 2005-09-29 13:37:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved this poem, its filled with emotion and imagery and i think that you did a wonderful job of telling your emotions, Love is eaither a great thing or the 3 words that can destroy something great.. good luck and keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]

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