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    dots Submission Name: Another failed relationshipdots
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    Author: lost and alone
    ASL Info:    19/F/Sandiego,CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 159/140/58
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAnother failed relationshipdots
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    I thought 'this time it was for real'
    But now I know,
    I was wrong.
    I'm just not sure,
    what I want anymore.
    I know how lonely life can get.
    But maybe,
    I need a break from you.
    I need time and space.
    I need time to think,
    and space to feel.
    and time to figure out what's real.
    You think you know me.
    But I don't even know myself.
    I'm still living to learn,
    and learning to live.
    Time seems to be,
    going so fast.
    and I can't slow it down,
    to save my life.
    Time seems to be going
    on without me.
    I look around, and I don't,
    know what to expect.
    I look and see,
    that everyone and everything
    has changed around me.
    I don't wanna, be alone,
    but I don't think your ready
    to be a man,
    who can deal with a woman like me.
    I have a big responsability
    and your not willing
    to stand by me.
    and I can't make decisions
    based on how you feel,
    or what you want.
    Because I have to do this,
    for me and my baby.




    Submitted on 2005-09-29 14:02:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ANOTHER WONDERFUL CREATION YOU SEEM TO HAVE A FULL GRIPP ON YOUR EMOTIONS SO THAT YOUR ABLE TO ELAIN THEM VERY WELL. IF I WOULD CHANGE ANYTHING IT WOULD PROBOBLY THE RYME SCHEME OF IT ALL I LIKE WORDS THAT FLOW TOGETHER AND RYME IN WAY THAT YOU WOULDN'T THINK OF THOSE TO WORDS FITTING TOGETHER BUT STILL AWESOME CONTENT!
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by always thinking | [ Reply to This ]
      Very beutiful write i commend you on putting your child first.
    too many people would not think of the child and only look at there own self gratifaction
    i wish you all the luck in the world with your little one and trust me
    there will be someone for you. Your positive outlook is very refreshing

    TAKE CARE
    | Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i absolutely love this poem. i know exactly what you're going through because i am going through the same thing. your writing is amazing and it flowed together beautifully keep up the good work and remember there is someone out there for you good luck
    | Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]


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