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    dots Submission Name: Revenge for the wicked.dots
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    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 299
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
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    dotsRevenge for the wicked.dots
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    they say revenge can never please
    but I believe if I take your life
    my guilt may subside
    just a tiny piece will fly
    away and I wont hear your voice any longer.
    I thought that you were gone forever
    but you came back and stole another.
    How dare you take a childís life
    from the womb
    who gave you that fucken
    right to take upon the pain you wish on me
    on them instead?
    They say revenge can never please
    but Iíd take in all that sin
    to see you dead
    how dare you live and breathe as I shed
    these tears
    for the young child I will never meet
    who gave you life again?
    Who renewed and gave into sin
    for I shall see you dead again.
    They say revenge can never please
    but even now as my soul speaks
    I can see it
    your death, your heart in my hands
    lets rise to the game
    you started to play
    let my sword take your life.
    Let this free our pain.
    How dare you commit such a sin
    upon the women I let in.
    How dare you test me in this way
    Iíll taste your blood and bathe in its flood
    how dare you walk this earth
    how dare you bring this fucken curse
    I will shed your very core
    upon her footsteps
    to set soar
    the tiniest piece of sorrow
    though the thought of this is hallow
    I shall see your eyes fade
    bring the death again
    I shall bathe myself in sin just
    to hear your final scream
    to watch you old man
    fade as you bleed.
    I will make you suffer
    I will make you pay
    they say revenge can never please
    but they have never been me.






    Submitted on 2005-09-29 18:30:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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