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    dots Submission Name: high school sugardots
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    Author: andnow
    ASL Info:    19.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 136/135/42
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 830
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       hehe i dunno


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    dotshigh school sugardots
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    Iím staring at the ceiling
    while absentmindedly,
    writing your name
    on my lined paper.

    With graphite decoration,
    and careful designs,
    I fold an origami heart,
    slip it in a pocket,
    and carry it along.

    Itís gonna be a lucky day.

    Iím smiling at strangers
    walking down the street.
    Singing along to every
    song playing in my head.
    Dropping pennies in the gutters
    for the innocent kids to find.

    Because all day youíre on my mind.
    Just the thought of you can
    make my heart explode,
    and always in the warm way.

    Youíre my last waking thoughts,
    ensuring sweet dreams
    and a sweeter tomorrow.




    Submitted on 2005-09-29 18:47:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree, I was wondering where this poem was headed and it really ended up nowhere. Good ideas, but they need to be put together in an assemblence of some order. I understand the whole love thing, about being carefree and simplistic. But the title threw me off. By high school, you should be more mature about love than that. I'd say the "love" your refering to is more the puppy love of junior high.
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice flow of how you were able to bring together some things that people wouldn't usually talk about in their poetry.
    Great write and I liked it a lot and now all you can do is keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this poem. it has a simple, but honest nature and some very rewarding lines.

    some of the toughts that it invokes are really cool. I mean, the thought of "dropping pennies in the gutters for the innocent kids to find"2 is just wonderful.

    well done.
    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by adamastor | [ Reply to This ]


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