Dammit,
I knew I shouldn’t have played with it,
But it was stronger than me,
Fire,
Extremely hazardous,
Can go in it effortlessly,
Can’t go out of it,
It ain’t that simple,
This is a immense trouble,
Why?
We don’t know,
The reason,
None…
This was pretty short and I'd really liked to have seen you elaborate on it...it felt like it could have been great, and what you have here is but it feels like it's just the begginning of something so much bigger for this one...but on the other perspective this was slightly mysterious and very thought envoking...loved it all in all! peace
This is a good one I really like how you leave it to the readers imagination as to what the theme is I have now read a couple of your writes and you do have talent You are easily able to switch from emotional writes to comedic writes and also deep themed writes Excellent job God Bless Ron
This was kinda short and i feel that you could've did better. It was still a good poem but i look for more out of you as a poet. I can't wait to read more. Much Support Danni
Submission Name: Dammit
