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    dots Submission Name: PRESENT state of evolutiondots

    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPRESENT state of evolutiondots

    present state of evolution

    does wisdom come with age,or with evolution?
    and i'm asking have you found
    the perfect solution?
    we are all still children,when we happen to die
    and this is the sole reason,i happen to cry
    i want it faster
    the wisdom i seek
    for as we are now
    well....it sure looks bleak.

    the clock is ticking,the countdowns begun
    and it started when,
    you became a son
    or someones daughter,yes i'll say you'll falter
    nothing i haven't done before
    i ask is there more?

    we must rise above,to be able to breathe
    i've spent all my time,
    trying to leave.this place that i hate,and the fate that i made.

    i must be a neanderthal
    did ya happen to see me fall?

    i am not ashamed,and am humbled in all's Presence.i beg of you not to take yours away from me.give me a Present.in our Present state of evolution.a true Present is a rarity.as rare as yours is.i beg to see

    i was born too early
    and im leaving late
    spring must be

    lol wes all toyysruss

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      This was an unique and interesting piece and I like the questions you raise. I liked the style and liked, "i must be a neanderthal
    did ya happen to see me fall?" That was very clever. Good job!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif
    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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