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PRESENT state of evolution

Author: toyysruss
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PRESENT state of evolution

present state of evolution

does wisdom come with age,or with evolution?
and i'm asking have you found
the perfect solution?
we are all still children,when we happen to die
and this is the sole reason,i happen to cry
i want it faster
the wisdom i seek
for as we are now sure looks bleak.

the clock is ticking,the countdowns begun
and it started when,
you became a son
or someones daughter,yes i'll say you'll falter
nothing i haven't done before
i ask is there more?

we must rise above,to be able to breathe
i've spent all my time,
trying to leave.this place that i hate,and the fate that i made.

i must be a neanderthal
did ya happen to see me fall?

i am not ashamed,and am humbled in all's Presence.i beg of you not to take yours away from me.give me a our Present state of evolution.a true Present is a rare as yours is.i beg to see

i was born too early
and im leaving late
spring must be

lol wes all toyysruss

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  This was an unique and interesting piece and I like the questions you raise. I liked the style and liked, "i must be a neanderthal
did ya happen to see me fall?" That was very clever. Good job!
Love,Peace,Joy! tif
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