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    dots Submission Name: True Frienddots
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    Author: LoneWolf
    ASL Info:    16/F/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 136/108/19
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 853
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    Bytes: 1268



    Description:
       i know it looks kind of lengthy, but it's actually shortened. i took out some useless crap that didnt' really fit or make sense.

    this was from my Age of Loneliness (my definition of 'age' = 2+years... from around the end of 7th to partly into beginning of 9th) and it's not quite as good as it could be i guess, but i still like it.

    try reading the whole thing and i think it will be ok.


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    dotsTrue Frienddots
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    I'm floating through and empty space
    I'm swimming in the mist
    Until morning hits me in the face
    and i realize, it doesn't exist
    I'm tired of being let down all the time
    Disappointment to the max
    There's no place I can ever call mine
    Nowhere for me to relax
    I'm always tight
    and always tense
    ready to fight
    but wait, it doesn't make sense
    why should i have to be this way?
    Why can't i sleep in peace?
    no one listens to what i say
    and now my murmurs cease
    secrets locked inside my head
    feeling left untold
    things tha tnever will be said
    precious memories, i hold
    until i can find a friend who hears
    all the truths within me
    someone with open arms and ears
    to take the weight off my body
    i can't take this for much longer
    come and help me please
    support me, make me that much stronger
    help my pain to ease
    guide me like a true friend would
    don't leave me all alone
    stand by me like angels should
    don't let me walk alone
    aid me through to the end
    if only i had, just one true friend...




    Submitted on 2005-09-29 19:48:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beatuiful.

    I love it, it's got so much deep feeling and personal meaning put into it.

    I often longed for that one true friend; the one that would hold me and catch me when I fell. Look me in the eyes and tell me it would be alright. Make me tell the truth about how I was feeling and how life was going.

    Then I got him. He was wonderful, a true friend. And then he moved to Germany after about two months of friendship...typical huh? lol

    But I grow each day more and more because I don't have someone to pick me up, I'm taught more responsiblity than most adults have. I learn alot on my own.

    But of course...I still long for that true friend.

    You hit a nerve with this poem dear, wonderful job...I love it, it's beautiful.

    Hope you find that friend.

    -Miss M.
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
      very awesome poem you expressed yourself perfectly You said you wrote it a while ago hopefully your no longer feeling sad and found someone you can call a true friend
    i know exactly how you felt as i have been there numerous times myself
    Stay positive
    Looking forward to your next poem please let me know when you write it

    Take care
    | Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      that was awesome! man i love your work its amazing.. the timing was unreal you did it so well! keep me posted on more of your poems! LOVE IT
    | Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by unnatainable | [ Reply to This ]
      Good poem. A little rough around the edges in some places, a. k. a. some of the flow was a bit off because of a couple lines containing a few more syllables. But overall, a very good write. Good emotion, I enjoyed it!

    ~Mandi~
    | Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by Mandi Gayle | [ Reply to This ]


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