Description: i know it looks kind of lengthy, but it's actually shortened. i took out some useless crap that didnt' really fit or make sense.
this was from my Age of Loneliness (my definition of 'age' = 2+years... from around the end of 7th to partly into beginning of 9th) and it's not quite as good as it could be i guess, but i still like it.
try reading the whole thing and i think it will be ok.
I'm floating through and empty space
I'm swimming in the mist
Until morning hits me in the face
and i realize, it doesn't exist
I'm tired of being let down all the time
Disappointment to the max
There's no place I can ever call mine
Nowhere for me to relax
I'm always tight
and always tense
ready to fight
but wait, it doesn't make sense
why should i have to be this way?
Why can't i sleep in peace?
no one listens to what i say
and now my murmurs cease
secrets locked inside my head
feeling left untold
things tha tnever will be said
precious memories, i hold
until i can find a friend who hears
all the truths within me
someone with open arms and ears
to take the weight off my body
i can't take this for much longer
come and help me please
support me, make me that much stronger
help my pain to ease
guide me like a true friend would
don't leave me all alone
stand by me like angels should
don't let me walk alone
aid me through to the end
if only i had, just one true friend...
I love it, it's got so much deep feeling and personal meaning put into it.
I often longed for that one true friend; the one that would hold me and catch me when I fell. Look me in the eyes and tell me it would be alright. Make me tell the truth about how I was feeling and how life was going.
Then I got him. He was wonderful, a true friend. And then he moved to Germany after about two months of friendship...typical huh? lol
But I grow each day more and more because I don't have someone to pick me up, I'm taught more responsiblity than most adults have. I learn alot on my own.
But of course...I still long for that true friend.
You hit a nerve with this poem dear, wonderful job...I love it, it's beautiful.
very awesome poem you expressed yourself perfectly You said you wrote it a while ago hopefully your no longer feeling sad and found someone you can call a true friend i know exactly how you felt as i have been there numerous times myself Stay positive Looking forward to your next poem please let me know when you write it
Good poem. A little rough around the edges in some places, a. k. a. some of the flow was a bit off because of a couple lines containing a few more syllables. But overall, a very good write. Good emotion, I enjoyed it!