I see you standing there in line,
Leaning against the barricade like you own the place.
Your dyed black hair falling into your bright blue eyes.
Eyebrow piercing glinting,
Faded Misfits shirt hanging down
Over your punked-out cut offs;
Untied Vans with lyrics written on the sides.
The chain of your wallet clanking against metal.
You are everything that I used to want.
So now I need to tell you that you can go home;
The tickets to my heart are all sold out,
And don't try to sneak in.
They were all bought up
By the boy with plain brown eyes.
The one that wears a quiet expression,
And doesn't wear his heart on his sleeve.
Listens to calmer music,
Doesn't scream into microphones,
Or thrash on a guitar.
But he is the one for me.
Opposites attract and it's true.
Here I am with my Flamin' Chucks,
Enough bracelets to cover seven arms,
Blacked-out like a depressed teenager.
And he stands next to me:
Tall and proud and clean cut.
Nothing like what I ever expected
But more than I could ever want.
Holding the ticket to my sold out heart.
| The ending was definately not what I expected. From the beginning I expected it to be a cliché teenager-ish explanation of meeting the perfect guy while standing in line at a sold out concert... but no, that's not what it was and the ending is terrific. I like it -- and yes, opposites really do attract. This poem is actually quite sweet in the end.|
|| Posted on 2006-03-26 00:00:00 | by teenage_dirtbag | [ Reply to This ] || awe, this is really good. i liked reading it alot!|
did you really like guys like that?
haha, it was so awesome i easily went with the flow.
hmm, i was never good at giving comments, but hey oh well. i like this alot, really really good.
|| Posted on 2005-10-22 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ] || I read this and I almost want to laugh because I can remember some of the poems I've read of yours when I first discovered your art. You seem to be in a very good place right now with the help of (but not totally thanx to, I'm sure) this new dude in your life. I only assume this is the same guy you mentioned in a jurnal a while back. A very interesting piece. I like how you kinda close the book on an old chapter completly so you can give all of yourself to this new one. Very mantatory if you expect anything from any kind relationship. |
"The one that ...Listens to calmer music...he stands next to me...Holding the ticket to my sold out heart."
Very well put.
|| Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by spoken | [ Reply to This ] || I think this is a good peice .. Its good that you find the right person for you even if he is the compleate opposite of what you wanted to begin with. Its funny how you think you want something and you are soooo set and sure of it and you set ur mind to it and keep telling urself he is what you want ... and then this compleat oppiste type of person comes and sweeps you off your feet and you would have never even expected it... i think this explains this sooo well great job and keep up the good work!||| Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ] |