Description: This poem is about my two little brothers -- you can pick it appart as much as you want but it is truely from the heart and it means more to me then any of you will know ... Me and my brothers do not live together they live with my mom and i live with my grandparents ... this helped me express how i feel about it in so many ways ... I hope you all get it ..
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Three souls combined by the same womb
Two of those souls in a search for the unknown
They are crying for someones helping hand
to take them out of this hell that they bear
Only at ages 2 and 7 and already seen all the unseen
The other soul looking in on a place
she once called home
a place she left a long time ago
a place she was saved from at the ripe age of 6
a place she wished she could forget exist
She would save them if she had the chance
the pain she feels is much more advanced
she would take them to the home that cared
so they could have the real life she beard
a life of faith and help and care
a life full of trust and unconditional love
This will never happen although its in her dreams
the life she wants for them is unjustly accused
of stealing her from her family
and put into a world all her own
she will never be able to let those two see
what it feels like
To be free .....
Part of doing this thing called poetry is a gift that's been given to all of us. That we found each other here and can share is another. It seems to me that your little brothers will be fine someday and as free as you.
There isn't anything to change in this, it feels like it comes straight from your heart, and when that happens, it's a gift. Keep writing and we will keep watching. Thanks for sharing your life,
Oh... That's so sad. It seems as if your brothers are trapped in a cage with no key. But their house can't be that bad, can it? This is nice how there's no extra frills on the words or anything excessive. It's truly heartfelt and I appreciate that kind of stuff.
Well, Michael's comment is sort of a hard act to follow... so I'll just say this: This poem is very complex, but without trying to hard, which makes it real. I like it, but as you said, I can never connect with it they way you do, or even the way Liz does, as I haven't been separted from my sibling. Of course, the wonderful thing about good poety is that it's a slice of a person's soul, and I probably understand you better by reading this than I would if I talked to you for an hour. Here's a personal question that I don't really expect you to answer: If you had the choice, would you rather live separted from you siblings and hope that someday, their life will change for the better and intersect with yours, or live with your siblings, so that you can all struggle through the same thing together? Anyway, I hope you keep posting your work.
yes, yes you will...because i know you...and i lobve you..and you get what you want...no matter what it is..you will just keep fighting for it until you get them with you...your the strongest willed person i know and you have an *almost* unbreakable spirit...BUT for when everything is that overwhelming ill be here to lend you a helping hand to show i care to show i want them to grow up in a better place just as much as you...even though i still haven't met your mom...and its almost been a year...but i can't wait till your b-day...since you know my present...i'm buying you a second one...no matter what you say...and this next thing im gonna say will sound conceited...but i mean well...you may owe me your life...but i owe you my love...i feel our paths crossing wasnt just coincedince...maybe fate if you believe in such...im here for you always and forever...<3 Michael Damien Hughes
wow that is a very deep poem, and it really sucks that you really never see your brothers, i have a little sister and an older brother and i never see me older brother because he is in college and i'm in high school so we have totally different lives, so i can say i know what it is like to miss a sibling just not any where near what you feel, what i really like about this poem is that you say how much you want to help them like the lines
"She would save them if she had the chance the pain she feels is much more advanced she would take them to the home that cared so they could have the real life she beard a life of faith and help and care a life full of trust and unconditional love"
i just like them so much because it really shows how you feel and how much you want to help them.
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