Okay, i just have to comment on this one for a couple of reasons. I often liken the creation of a poem to childbirth. I say that they are 'being born'. So i guess we have that in common. Also, i saw a poster of famous writer's quotes concerning writing the other day and there was one that your poem reminded me of.
"Writing is easy. You simply stare at a blank page until your forehead sweats blood." I think it was Hemingway, though i don't rightfully remember.
'Needle' is one of those words like 'heart' or 'breath' or 'blossom' that is rife with meaning for metaphor and analogy. The idea of 'No Needle' really works well to encapsulate the feeling or condition you are attempting to express.
...And i took that to be 'mind-racing...but not writing'. I can totally relate. I was right there myself just yesterday, and its da.mn well frustrating isn't it?
Bleeding on to a page...when words flow like blood. Really strikes at the heart of the matter. Nice little poem. Glad i stumbled on it.
yeah it has a lot of meaning and talent here ... wow i love it .. well very short and sweet .. that is all we need... take care and if you have a chance please take a look to my writing ...thanks for sharing ... peace and love! Victor!
i like it it totally gets the point i am pretty sure youre talking about writers block i have such a major case of it the only lines i get disapear in the whirl of my pink eraser and any ideas are never good enough so i understand but hey at least you got a poem from it...
I just read your journal, I'm glad you are submitting, good luck. I like this one Amy, no more fitting theme than a little pain to coax a write out of us. It's amazing how we attend to the mundane as bored observers of life. Something extraordinary has to happen in order for us to break out of linear thinking. Did I say that right?
Choosing pain is not part of my nature, I wonder if I'm really an artist? That might be a good theme for a poem. If you need any help with submitting, let me know. Love and hugs, Nan
When there is nothing to write about there is writing about writing ... and I guess this critique will make me guilty of writing about writing about writing ...
So its starts a few million thoughts .... only a few million huh - must have been a slow day -lol
And of course it is a good metaphor the haystacks and the search for the needle .... so many things that stop us writing - its been done before, its meaningless to others/too meaningful for me, its boring, its egocentric, its introverted ... and on and on we go and write nothing.
Still its not like we have to expect everyone to be totally floored or writhing on the floor in ecstacy with everything that we write, only that we be honest and see where we are and what we are doing, and then our writing will have a timeless charm.
So here you have no needles and no poems. What can be said ... its just how it is.
concise and to the point (haha!).. most of us poets can relate to this one, a million thoughts in the brain and yet nothing we think worth putting to the penpoint.. i like the idea of the needle, like you are bleeding your words from your soul, which you are.
nice slice of writer's block.. looks like you found a needle after all!
I like this...needle in a haystack...great poem...one in a million...millions of thoughts! I get it now! It took me a second the first few times I read it. I like this a lot. :) A great poem is so hard to write and with so many thoughts that writers think it's sort of impossible to to write the right one. Great piece sis. *Hugs* Take care. Love to you!
Haha it's funny that I was thinking about writing a piece like this but I dont think I could get it to sound like yours. Good job, short and sweet sort of like a haiku (though i never really like those). Writer's block is a b*tch is'nt it.
Short and simple! For me it conveys different meaning for someone that they could meke it their own. I can relate with the anguish that you wanted to write more, but cofined with a writers block. It's like we can do more, but somethings in the way to get there.
The first two lines are your selling point which increased my interest. Wish there could be more...
A few more lines to strengthen your ending would be great :)
Short and sweet..it reminds me a little of nan whitcombes (Nanushka) short pieces...and i truly love her work...i like this way of summing up your thoughts ...and i enjoyed the analogy very much..i love to use them myself if and when i can...as i understand it you have many thoughts but nothing that inspires you enough to write...sometimes looking for a needle in a haystack is a very hard task...as is writing poetry without a good muse...just my thoughts...stormy
I think I get what you were writing about.. Kinda like writer's block. You should check out the "trilogy" called Writer's Block - they're in my profile - I wrote one of'em. But yeah, I know how it feels to not have any thoughts in your head and you try to "find a needle in the haystack" but you just can't. Get your thoughts flowin', baby!
Gosh, I have been at that point (pardon the pun)several times. A million thoughts, but none that would actually come together as a poem. I like the metaphor you used. Haystack after haystack of thoughts.. yet, no needle to prick the finger and get your blood flowing. Original and well put. Wish I could say so much with such few words. Very nice! ~Sandra