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    dots Submission Name: No Needledots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
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    dotsNo Needledots

    I had a few million thoughts,
    proverbial haystack after haystack,
    but I found no needle among them
    to prick my finger,
    so no words flowed,
    no poems were born.

    Submitted on 2005-09-29 22:53:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like not just the needle in the haystack idea as related to thoughts...but also the pricking the finger..like pricking the pen..but no ink flowed...still can't get the writing to bleed out of me..

    another wonderful write...less is more...this is shorter but like Hemmingway..leaves us in between the lines pulling out thoughts.

    | Posted on 2011-07-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Short, sweet, and full of little gems this one. I like it a great deal, if only we all dared to write in blood in place of this timmid and cowardly ink!

    I am biased against any art that directly adresses itself as a rule but this I happily make exception for.

    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Jason The Basta | [ Reply to This ]
      I had a few million thoughts
    proverbial haystack after haystack
    but I found no needle among them
    to prick my finger
    so no words flowed
    no poems were born

    Let your creative blood flow woman. I love this...the imagery of searching a haystack full of words and haviong no inspiration to prick your mind. That was quaint and yet intriguing to read

    Certainly was a poem born though

    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, i just have to comment on this one for a couple of reasons. I often liken the creation of a poem to childbirth. I say that they are 'being born'. So i guess we have that in common. Also, i saw a poster of famous writer's quotes concerning writing the other day and there was one that your poem reminded me of.

    "Writing is easy. You simply stare at a blank page until your forehead sweats blood." I think it was Hemingway, though i don't rightfully remember.

    'Needle' is one of those words like 'heart' or 'breath' or 'blossom' that is rife with meaning for metaphor and analogy. The idea of 'No Needle' really works well to encapsulate the feeling or condition you are attempting to express.

    ...And i took that to be 'mind-racing...but not writing'. I can totally relate. I was right there myself just yesterday, and its da.mn well frustrating isn't it?

    Bleeding on to a page...when words flow like blood. Really strikes at the heart of the matter. Nice little poem. Glad i stumbled on it.

    see you later,
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by twacky | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah it has a lot of meaning and talent here ...
    wow i love it .. well very short and sweet .. that is all we need...
    take care and if you have a chance please take a look to my writing ...thanks for sharing ...
    peace and love!
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it it totally gets the point i am pretty sure youre talking about writers block i have such a major case of it the only lines i get disapear in the whirl of my pink eraser and any ideas are never good enough so i understand but hey at least you got a poem from it...

    | Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      So short and simple yet so meaningful! Personnaly, I always have to feel somehting painful (well, most of the times) to bring the words out of me on paper. Well done!
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by silverfragment | [ Reply to This ]
      I just read your journal, I'm glad you are submitting, good luck. I like this one Amy, no more fitting theme than a little pain to coax a write out of us. It's amazing how we attend to the mundane as bored observers of life. Something extraordinary has to happen in order for us to break out of linear thinking. Did I say that right?

    Choosing pain is not part of my nature, I wonder if I'm really an artist? That might be a good theme for a poem. If you need any help with submitting, let me know.
    Love and hugs,
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      When there is nothing to write about there is writing about writing ... and I guess this critique will make me guilty of writing about writing about writing ...

    So its starts a few million thoughts .... only a few million huh - must have been a slow day -lol

    And of course it is a good metaphor the haystacks and the search for the needle .... so many things that stop us writing - its been done before, its meaningless to others/too meaningful for me, its boring, its egocentric, its introverted ... and on and on we go and write nothing.

    Still its not like we have to expect everyone to be totally floored or writhing on the floor in ecstacy with everything that we write, only that we be honest and see where we are and what we are doing, and then our writing will have a timeless charm.

    So here you have no needles and no poems. What can be said ... its just how it is.
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by kanu | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah! Quintessentially Cuddle-esqe!

    You know I love your short poetry the best. There’s always so much to say and you say it all without having to use a lot of words.

    This one is a bit on the dark side, isn’t it? Nonetheless, I like it :)
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      concise and to the point (haha!).. most of us poets can relate to this one, a million thoughts in the brain and yet nothing we think worth putting to the penpoint.. i like the idea of the needle, like you are bleeding your words from your soul, which you are.

    nice slice of writer's block.. looks like you found a needle after all!

    | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I love that when I began reading this, I thought it would be just another clichéd poem using "needle in a haystack" references, but, as usual, you provided a pleasant suprise!

    The second half is amazing. That's all there is to it.

    | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this...needle in a haystack...great poem...one in a million...millions of thoughts! I get it now! It took me a second the first few times I read it. I like this a lot. :) A great poem is so hard to write and with so many thoughts that writers think it's sort of impossible to to write the right one. Great piece sis. *Hugs* Take care. Love to you!

    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, okay now, what do you think about that?
    Take someone who has absolutely nothing to say, write that fact down, and everybody loves it. And so do I. Enough said.
    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha it's funny that I was thinking about writing a piece like this but I dont think I could get it to sound like yours. Good job, short and sweet sort of like a haiku (though i never really like those). Writer's block is a b*tch is'nt it.
    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      AT LAST! a post that shows talent, deep thought and the ability to put muse to paper without making your reader think what the hell was this person thinking!

    "the proverbial haystack" I loved that! This has got to be one of the most original posts about writters block that I have ever seen and with that said...it makes it's way to my fav list!

    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and simple! For me it conveys different meaning for someone that they could meke it their own. I can relate with the anguish that you wanted to write more, but cofined with a writers block. It's like we can do more, but somethings in the way to get there.

    The first two lines are your selling point which increased my interest. Wish there could be more...

    A few more lines to strengthen your ending would be great :)
    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by wakethedead | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and sweet..it reminds me a little of nan whitcombes (Nanushka) short pieces...and i truly love her work...i like this way of summing up your thoughts ...and i enjoyed the analogy very much..i love to use them myself if and when i can...as i understand it you have many thoughts but nothing that inspires you enough to write...sometimes looking for a needle in a haystack is a very hard task...as is writing poetry without a good muse...just my thoughts...stormy
    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I get what you were writing about.. Kinda like writer's block. You should check out the "trilogy" called Writer's Block - they're in my profile - I wrote one of'em. But yeah, I know how it feels to not have any thoughts in your head and you try to "find a needle in the haystack" but you just can't. Get your thoughts flowin', baby!
    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by Lil Nick | [ Reply to This ]
      Gosh, I have been at that point (pardon the pun)several times. A million thoughts, but none that would actually come together as a poem. I like the metaphor you used. Haystack after haystack of thoughts.. yet, no needle to prick the finger and get your blood flowing. Original and well put.
    Wish I could say so much with such few words.
    Very nice!
    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]

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