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Author: Day DreaMeR
ASL Info:    19/F/somewhere
Elite Ratio:    6.23 - 853 /408 /53
Words: 98
Class/Type: Misc /Angry
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Just letting out some anger and annoyance I've had lately. So yea I don't expect many comments on this one but yea its one of those writes that I post so I can get feelings out. Maybe a title suggestion would be nice and thats all I'm really going to ask out of you guys.....


How I loathe your annoyance,
The way you look,
And the way you talk,
You speak pointless words and sentences,
Things that no one cares about,
Come from your ugly voice,
As you talk some more,
My temper drops lower and lower,
And my anger growing,
Not being able to stand your presence,
The bell rings,
I get up as fast as I can,
It was another day,
I still can't stand you,
Even the thought,
Gets to me,
One day you will push me,
Maybe just a little too far,
And will leave you filled with regret

Submitted on 2005-09-30 19:16:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Now we don't need any dead people coming from your hands. This is a pretty good write it was a little less structured than most of the pieces on elite but if you read my stuff I have no set structure so its all good.
| Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
  'Twas a lot of anger in this poem and it is good to get that out in the open, off your chest, so to speak.
I think it is a shame that one has to put up with this kinda of nonsense in order to get an education.
All I can say is hang in there and don't let this person get you down.
| Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  This was great, it reminds me of the girls who used to tease me at high school and all I wanted to do was just smack them in the face. Well since we've left and I've seen a few I have had the opportunity to smack them, not physically but one of them fell pregnant and now she is a single mum struggling to feed her children and I take pity on her.

You seem like a great person and don't let these things get you down, it will come back to them.

Thank you also for commenting on my work, I will do my best to improve it and let you know when it has been fixed
| Posted on 2005-11-02 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]
  is this about those annoying girls you told me about...just sound pretty pea d off here...i like this nice honest rant...feel better
| Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ] may think it's not much, but we do some of our best work in anger...anger gets the mind thinking, and energy flowing.I like the ending the best, the thing i get out of your poem is someone popular, and you can't stand them...well um anyway, great write!
| Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]
in this poem you showed some incredible emotion
im sorry that this person does not realize the real you
i can tell from your words that you are a caring person who has given him as much of the leash as you can
i have been there trust me

i would normally say try and give him another chance but i think youve been down that road before

Take Care
| Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I can definately relate to this. I know exactly how it feels to hate some one so much that it makes you so angry just to be in the same room as them. Great emotion and great job.
| Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  Good feeling on here... annoyance is so funny when it becomes angry violence and beating the mess out of someone ja ja ja... I love this poem beacuse I am on the edge of beating the hell out of someone beacuse he is just annoying and his little stupid jokes are the same ones from middle school... I've told him so many times leave me alone, dont put your well being at stake, get away from me, quit yappin your trap, etc but he do not understand that I am so serious about this but he will soon and when he does it will be too late beacuse he will be on a stretcher on his way to the hospital... Great poem very good expression of feeling

Jose J. Ortiz aka Josyman
| Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
  your poem is pretty good... it is just ranting and anger but it still has feeling eh?... i really like it... i know what you mean... you just hate them so much you want nothing more than to never see them again... the very thought of them makes you uneasy about conversation and hard of thoughts... the title i would suggest is possibly the hour you have him in class? or something like that... just ideas... enjoy
| Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by Esophagus1 | [ Reply to This ]
  I loved it! It was a great way to get out frustration and angry. I assume it's about a fellow class mate that's very aggragavting. LOL. Good job. I know I've had people in my classes that I just couldn't wait to get away from. That bell was the best time of day!
Anyways, GREAT work!
| Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by miss__smiles | [ Reply to This ]
  Ooo I love it. I can definitely feel the anger. I think that the last three lines might be my favorite. It's a perfect ending. You really expressed yourself wonderfully here. Hmm... title... I'm horrible with titles (due to lack of imagination). I usually just pick a line that best sums up the whole thing. Ooo you know... this reminds me of someone. My stupid ex-boyfriend. I HATE everything about him. He's such an [censored], and he doesnt even get it. He's a [censored] idiot. Oh well. Anyways, I like this one a lot. As always, great job.

| Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  This was a great write Brenna! I can relate to this. There's this one chick in my class and she just annoys the hell outta me. And I have to sit beside her in pretty much every class we have together. And when the bell rings, I'm out and away from her as fast as possible. I'd write more, but my step-dad's being an ass. So I'll talk to you laters.
| Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]

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