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    dots Submission Name: loss of humanitydots
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    Author: sinjen
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 63/77/19
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsloss of humanitydots
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    Cast aside all regiments of glory
    Honor now tarnished, tainted with greed
    Bleed out all hope of redemption
    Selflessness replaced by a baser need

    Resurrection is futile in lieu of past
    Knowledge gained ingrained remains
    Purge the truth from memory
    No rebirth, the phoenix in flames

    Veiled Innocence the mortal dream
    Twisted bent to justify morality
    Depraved spawn of man manipulate
    False gods bent on immortality




    Submitted on 2005-09-30 21:40:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your title "Loss of humanity" caught my attention, and the poem itself was not a disappointment. You have managed to express your opinions on this subject very creatively.

    "Veiled Innocence the mortal dream
    Twisted bent to justify morality"

    These lines really echo the growing aspects that this media-driven, tarnished world is experiencing.

    A well structured poem, with great content and thourough message.
    | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by Natalia Murray | [ Reply to This ]


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