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    dots Submission Name: silhouette of your dreamsdots
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    Author: kma12790
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 28/41/18
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 845
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 410



    Description:
       hmm, comments and crits are welcome...not really any personal experience here, just in a mushy mood :-)


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    dotssilhouette of your dreamsdots
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    hopeless romantics
    counting kisses in the rain
    as foggy windows
    fade from dusk to day
    a warm embrace
    a thread that breaks
    crossing the line
    as the stars fall in place
    mind and body
    intertwined
    a soul thats just
    begninning to find
    that love is worth
    the risks and blood
    and gardens need
    such blooming buds




    Submitted on 2005-09-30 21:59:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Even the title of this piece attracted me to it, and the poem itself was definately not an anticlimax. I really enjoyed reading this, because you managed all the tecnicalities (rhyme, structure, rhythm) as well as emotion. Well written!
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Natalia Murray | [ Reply to This ]
      well, i must say for someone who wasn't putting any experience in to this piece, you really have a lot of it showing. this is great. very simple and so complex at the same time. the flow is right on. the rhyme is next to perfect. i have to give this a 4 out of 5 and a fave add. good job.
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by frozenflame | [ Reply to This ]


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