hey man, hows it going? i was just going through a couple of my old pieces, and you had always made sure to leave a comment, so i figured i should see how your are doing...what happened to your pic? i just now noticed it wasnt there...anyways, i really did like this piece, you put simply the true feelings of not only myself, but many, i really felt like i could personally connect with this piece, due to its honesty...your writing has gotten really good! keep it up, and stay in touch...
well I don't know exactly what the big freaking deal is really....so it is a poem symbolically speaking of love while talking about war---yeah so why the hard comments below, did I miss something--yeah it is a little vague and different than most of your writes but that is ok---no one ever saifd that different is bad. I personally see you as the one who; one fights for cause one strives for freedom a battle never ending the one who fights for love and compasion I think this is allright man keep it up LT
I have reread your poem 'To Fight for a Cause' and your comments that its about people but I still feel that this would work better as a skelaton on which to build. I also think Storm of Bliss had some interesting comments. Nevertheless, I have read a few of your other poems too including your one about cliché's. A poem incidently that I do like and you're right:
each mind is unique our thoughts are not the same we each express differently
so what works for you and Fadingperson may not work for me but I'm sorry if I trod on your toes. Feel free to slam my poetry any time. Comradenessie
I do understand your point but, it seems like you are on the ouside looking in. I hope you are. There is never a cause for war just a power struggle that seems to put those who have the least to gain in the middle. The read was a little hard but simple.
one fights for cause one strives for freedom a battle never ending
This is life period. A constant struggle to be heard. A constant battle for freedom.
well, i like this poem and i don't agree with everything that comradenessie said, (Always remember on this site you really don't have to return thank you's to people that piss you off, so do what i do just scream F@*k you at the computer and be down with it) ok now what i do agree with comradenessie is that you very well could be talking about the war and what's going on now, that's not the idae i had though when i first read it, i got more of just talking about people in a general sense, and i'd have to say that my favorite stanzas are
"one fights for cause one strives for freedom a battle never ending
with thoughts of courage a will to succeed this day becomes a sacred night"
and i like this so much because of how true it really is, like a person could just be standing up for what they believe, that's what those just reminded me of.
I wonder if you have really considered your theme. With so much suffering in the world at the moment and our country's present illegal occupation of another country, there is a lot to be said about fighting for a cause and the suffering caused by war. This poem seems a little vague beyond a sense of depression it seems to lack real emotional force. The images seem clichéd. Perhaps more distinct images would help. Possibly you could use these stanzas as a skeleton on which to build. If you decide to do that let me know. I'd be happy to take a second look. Comradenessie