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    dots Submission Name: To fight for Causedots
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    Author: musclebound350
    ASL Info:    26/male
    Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 197/202/70
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsTo fight for Causedots
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    one fights for cause
    one strives for freedom
    a battle never ending

    with thoughts of courage
    a will to succeed
    this day becomes a sacred night

    many fight for freedom
    some kill for power
    but one for love and compassion

    the life of one
    will kills thousands
    to fulfill their desire

    the night has come
    for all who fought
    this is the final hour

    where love and power
    and freedom combine
    lifes blood begins to shower




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      hey man, hows it going? i was just going through a couple of my old pieces, and you had always made sure to leave a comment, so i figured i should see how your are doing...what happened to your pic? i just now noticed it wasnt there...anyways, i really did like this piece, you put simply the true feelings of not only myself, but many, i really felt like i could personally connect with this piece, due to its honesty...your writing has gotten really good! keep it up, and stay in touch...

    tony
    | Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]
      well I don't know exactly what the big freaking deal is really....so it is a poem symbolically speaking of love while talking about war---yeah so why the hard comments below, did I miss something--yeah it is a little vague and different than most of your writes but that is ok---no one ever saifd that different is bad. I personally see you as the one who;
    one fights for cause
    one strives for freedom
    a battle never ending
    the one who fights for love and compasion
    I think this is allright man keep it up
    LT
    | Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      I have reread your poem 'To Fight for a Cause' and your comments that its about people but I still feel that this would work better as a skelaton on which to build. I also think Storm of Bliss had some interesting comments. Nevertheless, I have read a few of your other poems too including your one about cliché's. A poem incidently that I do like and you're right:

    each mind is unique
    our thoughts are not the same
    we each express differently

    so what works for you and Fadingperson may not work for me but I'm sorry if I trod on your toes. Feel free to slam my poetry any time.
    Comradenessie
    | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]
      I do understand your point but, it seems like you are on the ouside looking in. I hope you are. There is never a cause for war just a power struggle that seems to put those who have the least to gain in the middle. The read was a little hard but simple.

    one fights for cause
    one strives for freedom
    a battle never ending

    This is life period. A constant struggle to be heard. A constant battle for freedom.

    Who is really free?

    Wisdom Seeker
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      well, i like this poem and i don't agree with everything that comradenessie said, (Always remember on this site you really don't have to return thank you's to people that piss you off, so do what i do just scream F@*k you at the computer and be down with it) ok now what i do agree with comradenessie is that you very well could be talking about the war and what's going on now, that's not the idae i had though when i first read it, i got more of just talking about people in a general sense, and i'd have to say that my favorite stanzas are

    "one fights for cause
    one strives for freedom
    a battle never ending

    with thoughts of courage
    a will to succeed
    this day becomes a sacred night"

    and i like this so much because of how true it really is, like a person could just be standing up for what they believe, that's what those just reminded me of.

    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      I wonder if you have really considered your theme. With so much suffering in the world at the moment and our country's present illegal occupation of another country, there is a lot to be said about fighting for a cause and the suffering caused by war. This poem seems a little vague beyond a sense of depression it seems to lack real emotional force. The images seem clichéd. Perhaps more distinct images would help. Possibly you could use these stanzas as a skeleton on which to build. If you decide to do that let me know. I'd be happy to take a second look.
    Comradenessie
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]


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