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    dots Submission Name: Rampaging Monkeysdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 11
    Class/Type: Haiku/Comedy
    Total Views: 736
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 77



    Description:
       This is a little funny haiku I wrote like way back in the day... yeah I know it's weird but so what We all weird in our own way


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    Monkeys jump on me
    From that big coconut tree
    Rampaging monkeys




    Submitted on 2005-10-01 07:53:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, that was... absurd? no i thought that it was amusing because of its... unique nature, i'm not really sure what you were going for with this, but i thought it was a great job if senseless fun was intended.
    ~Raven~
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by lucianraven | [ Reply to This ]
      What's the point of life if we can't be wierd? And if we can't blow off with a little something silly now and again, then what's the damn point?
    This is cute..perfectly senseless and adorable. Tho it kind of reminded me of monkey's throwing crappola at people at the zoo...hehe little buttheads.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good, have you thought of expanding it into a series of haikus?

    Obviously, everybody likes it, so give 'em more!

    Nicely done.

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Now that's the kid of sh-it I like.I'd have it in a frame on my desk or something. keep it up. It seems like you took the wordsrampaging monkeys and worked backwards. I AM OFFICIALLY INSPIRED
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by hellyeah | [ Reply to This ]
      i love monkeys! their cute! so this was cute! i dont think it was weird but it made me happy cuz monkeys r cute!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha! This is a wonderful haiku! I dont think I have ever read one about monkeys before so this, I believe, is a first! Very nicely done with proper form and syllable usage! And its about cute playful monkeys too! Cant get much better than that in 11 words now can ya?! Really good job with this cute little haiku! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Quite humorous I enjoyed!
    I can just "see" the scene in my mind.. lol.

    And it's true.. we ARE all weird in our own way.. that's what makes us unique and interesting... like this haiku.

    Nice!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      lol ha I like that. After I read it, I had to laugh and say, "what??" Thats how you know it's good. Whenever I make that confused, happy face, that means I like something. Too bad you couldnt see it. lol Oh well. You're right... it is weird... but I think "weird" is a compliment. Very nicely done.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      haha well this was quite an interesting one. Its one of those ones that make no sense and have no meaning to them but why not. haha. ummm I really don't know what to say but yea this was weird. :-P

    Brenna
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      What???
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      This so reminds me of my daughter. She is always singing:

    No more monkey's jumping on the bed!


    She'll just bust out of no where with it. In the car...the bathroom...the grocery store...any where! It's hilarious!

    This was quite amuzing! I loved it!

    Congrats! You just made it to my fav's list!

    Li
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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