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    dots Submission Name: Thousand Voicesdots

    Author: Robbing Hood
    ASL Info:    16/m/Ark
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 26/35/10
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Bytes: 376

       This is really really short and i wrote it just real fast one day in the middle of my home work but i sorta liked it and i hope you do too

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    dotsThousand Voicesdots

    In my head I hear a thousand voices/
    some louder than others but all make noises/
    some are bad and some are good/
    some just tell me to split your head like wood/
    I thinkin real hard i just don't know if i should/
    it's not that I couldn't cause I know that I could/
    and iF there was only 1 i'd be that 1 that would/

    Submitted on 2005-10-01 19:28:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      despite its length, it is really good. length does make a poem, but it is the words. and the words would have it me even harder than a fist. But I think it just needed to be heard! But all-in-all, its tight!
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by L.i. | [ Reply to This ]
      This definitely needs more. It seems like you got a line in your head...wrote it...and then gave up. You could give this a lot more life and a lot more character. You kind of drew away from your own ish here...pick back up where you left off and let me know when you do. I think that this deserves completion.

    Great beginning though. Excellente!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      it was hot you just gotta make it longer. Other than that it was good. I agree with unknown solider on the eminem part though..keep it up.

    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      this one was good but too short. it reminded me of eminem's guilty conscience when eminem was the bad voice and dre was the good voice and they were arguing over what u should do . nice write
    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      THE VOICES..well that is well done especially the last four lines.. the way the lines rhyme give a very eerie feel to the entire verse. the way that you have t6alked about the voices telling you to murder also adds a lot of character to the verse. i feel it is well written but shoet..may be some day i hope you will add more to it..i will be waiting to read it.
    | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by jassal | [ Reply to This ]
      The writing nicely conveys a few conflicting emotions and makes it seem as if the narrator is more irritated by the voices than actually upset by them. Aside from a few minor grammatical mistakes this is nicely written

    | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]

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