lost acre
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lost acre
stuck in the imprisonment of my mind that leaves no cracks for the light to find it's my own padded room feeling the shadows that seem to always loom you should have know I was insane when you saw the note with my bloodstain I showed you how I tried to take myself to the throbbing tingle of that pleasent ache something that in no time cuts so deep that the price to pay could never be cheap from throbbing head, to searing blood all is masked by a fake hood the hood hides the anger, the hood hides the pain for the hood is merely the story's methane once you start trying you're lost in the axis the answers all seem to be trapt in the blackness they seemed to have lost their outline wouldn't it be easy if they were to align? just stand there in the open for you to see and free you from this frenzy? but the answers merely mock cause your lost in an endless sheepwalk and with the herd you falter along the dead-end acre wil you ever find the end? or forever follow the trend? |
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I relate to your writing. My words spill out very similar to yours. The ending I must say was outstanding! Everytime I'm surrounded by a mass of people I like to let out some obnoxious sheep noises to express my inter-most feelings towards them. Thanks for the good read. Chao.| | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ] | This is a captivating poem, which is really bursting with emotion. Even the first line: | "stuck in the imprisonment of my mind" drew me in, because I have written about this theme previously, and it's a subject which has always fascinated me. It is often the imprisoned minds which have the most freedom of expression through words. This writing really conveyed that well. I hope to read more of your work in the future. | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by Natalia Murray | [ Reply to This ] | brilliant...its very well written the rhyme had given the entire poem a new dimension! my favourite part: | but the answers merely mock cause your lost in an endless sheepwalk and with the herd you falter along the dead-end acre these lines are the best, it shows the frustation one feels when one sees the entire world just follow and not question. if we keep moving this way the world is doomed! | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by jassal | [ Reply to This ] | Wow. this is really good. usually Im not really into this kind of write but this was really really good. I loved it is was full of Emotions that... I dont know kind of engrossed me. This was a great write. Good Job! | Drea | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ] | |
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