Suicide
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I wrote this in the eight grade everyone i mean everyone i knew loved it including my teacher and i got a 98 on it. It was just something random i thought of after i had just read tragic saturday cause that poem that i wrote gave me the inspiration to write other poems. Weird but true.
Suicide
a tear drop in the lake noone seems to see a gun that's in a safe the girl that has the key a boy laying on the ground clinging to his life the girl sitting right beside him and not far away the knife The person in the boat jumps to his death the girl with the gun feels she has nothing left the boy and girl with the knife are rushed to the hospital maybe they still have life maybe just alittle everyone dies except that one girl she was very lucky says so does the world everyone whose died is standing by my side they learned a little late the price of suicide |
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| nicely done, but i dont understand it...but thats ok it was really good to read! wow im in 8th grade and i cant write [censored] like this! woah! nice job chic! Suicidalchild | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ] | I like your poem, it flows very well and almost everything fits into place. If you keep this up, you can become a very good writter. | | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ] | woa im aww struckin wow i like it but its deppring i hope u dont plane on committing suicide that would be fycked up and i dont want u to go:-( anywho it was a great write its a fav edition | | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ] | DUDE! GREAT WRITE! I thought I as a good poet, but you, you are........... crap I cant think of a word to describe how great of a writter you are. I love this poem. Im sooo adding it to my faves! Keep up the fantasic work.. | >:D | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ] | good job. i liked the poem. you are a good writer. if this is how good you were in 8 th grade i cant wait to read something recent. good job again. | | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by tomboy | [ Reply to This ] | omg...you know how if you read something good...you get this tingling feeling while your reading it?? thats exactly what i got reading this...i think when you were in the 8th grade you found your calling...this is going on my favorites list! | <333 Ashley... | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by intoxicated411 | [ Reply to This ] | |
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