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Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 120
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
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I wrote this in the eight grade everyone i mean everyone i knew loved it including my teacher and i got a 98 on it. It was just something random i thought of after i had just read tragic saturday cause that poem that i wrote gave me the inspiration to write other poems. Weird but true.


a tear drop in the lake
noone seems to see
a gun that's in a safe
the girl that has the key

a boy laying on the ground
clinging to his life
the girl sitting right beside him
and not far away the knife

The person in the boat
jumps to his death
the girl with the gun
feels she has nothing left

the boy and girl with the knife
are rushed to the hospital
maybe they still have life
maybe just alittle

everyone dies
except that one girl
she was very lucky
says so does the world

everyone whose died
is standing by my side
they learned a little late
the price of suicide

Submitted on 2005-10-02 13:49:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  nicely done, but i dont understand it...but thats ok it was really good to read! wow im in 8th grade and i cant write [censored] like this! woah! nice job chic!

| Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like your poem, it flows very well and almost everything fits into place. If you keep this up, you can become a very good writter.
| Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  woa im aww struckin wow i like it but its deppring i hope u dont plane on committing suicide that would be fycked up and i dont want u to go:-( anywho it was a great write its a fav edition
| Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
  DUDE! GREAT WRITE! I thought I as a good poet, but you, you are........... crap I cant think of a word to describe how great of a writter you are. I love this poem. Im sooo adding it to my faves! Keep up the fantasic work..

| Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ]
  good job. i liked the poem. you are a good writer. if this is how good you were in 8 th grade i cant wait to read something recent. good job again.
| Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by tomboy | [ Reply to This ] know how if you read something get this tingling feeling while your reading it?? thats exactly what i got reading this...i think when you were in the 8th grade you found your calling...this is going on my favorites list!

<333 Ashley...
| Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by intoxicated411 | [ Reply to This ]

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