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    dots Submission Name: Not Overdots
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    Author: tomboy
    Elite Ratio:    2.5 - 62/61/26
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       i was riding the bus home when this kid started joking about suicide and i chewed him out and got really upset.


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    I thought it was over.
    That I was gonna be fine.
    The I heard that voice.
    The one joking...
    Joking about suicide.
    I thought I was fine.
    I tried to hold it in.
    I couldn't do it.
    Not any longer.
    I burst out.
    It was an angry voice.
    I said things I shouldn't.
    I got mad and left it.
    Until I reach the safety,
    The safety behind a door.
    Then I broke down.
    I cried.
    That is when I saw,
    I'm not over it.




    Submitted on 2005-10-02 14:05:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm, i like the way that each line is terse and furious-like the mind fighting with the person that contains it. good work:-) keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by vampire | [ Reply to This ]
      its a good work this one ,i like it.
    also suicide really isnt something to joke about and to be honest this message is well portrayed in this poem by you :)
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by darkme | [ Reply to This ]
      Great write. Good going on verbally kikin his butt, lol. Hope they feel bad now. Some people just dont understand that things like that are a fragile subject, and shouldnt be joked about. I'd like to know how they would feel if someone they loved and cared about commited suicide, and see if they still joke about it then. Anywayz great write, it rocked.

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    | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ]


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