Sometimes I often wonder why things are the way they are. Am I dreaming?
Sometimes I feel so alone, even though I am surround by many. Are you turely there?
Sometimes I feel good, but years of anger and darkness inside. Why do I hurt?
Sometimes the pain from long ago is to much to bare. Can you see it?
Sometimes I wish for a new beginning, a change in tone. Don't you?
No one knows how I feel, though they think they do. What do you see?
Do you see the truth hidden in my eyes?
Do you see the pain tucked deep in my heart?
Do you hear the tears I cry fall each night? Do you really care?
Sometimes I conclude that me being here doesn't help you.
Sometimes I doubt that I am needed or really even wanted, just there to pass time.
Sometimes I ask myself, why me? What is so special about me, nothing that I see.
Sometimes I want to love so much, but who wants what little I have to give.
Sometimes I wish I could wash the past away, just sometimes go back. Do you?
| lots of rhetorical questions and this makes the reader think about how some1 really feels and wha answer they r looking for, it shows a lot of hurt some1 is feeling and i think it is great though how u set it up could have been much better.|
|| Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by my pain | [ Reply to This ] || This is pretty good, but I see a couple spelling errors and I think that you should breck the lines apart, in the format that they are in right now it seems kind of smushed right now.||| Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ] || Good write. Not as good as your other one, but still very good. I like how you made it sound like you were talking and thinking at the same time, or atleast that's what I think you were doing. The flow wasa bit off in this one, but oh well. Keep up the great work.|
|| Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ] |