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A Special World

Author: angel_eyes9701
ASL Info:    24 F Salem, OR
Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 19 /33 /14
Words: 87
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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A Special World

A special world for you and me
A special bond one cannot see
It wraps us up in its cocoon
And holds us fiercely in its womb.

Its fingers spread like fine spun gold
Gently nestling us to the fold
Like silken thread it holds us fast
Bonds like this are meant to last.

And though at times a thread may break
A new one forms in its wake
To bind us closer and keep us strong
In a special world, where we belong.

Submitted on 2005-10-02 15:15:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the flow and rhyme in this one...I like the idea of the poem...but i have a question for you and evreyone else who is reading this...Do you think about poems before you write, do you sit there and force yourself to write?

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| Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by Criss | [ Reply to This ]
  GREAT WRITE! The flow was great. The word choice phenominal (sorry if i spelled that wrong) The ryhming wasn't off anywhere at anytimes. Keep up the greay work. Welcome to Elite by the way.

| Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ]

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