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Submission Name: roxy dots

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Author:	splifford
Elite Ratio:	3.06 - 39/42/16
Words:	61

Class/Type:	Poetry/
Total Views:	226
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	377

Description:
i could have watched her closer
i could have said no
today i found her tennis ball
i gave it one last throw

roxy

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she stopped breathing on the way to the clinic
the nurse checked her eyes and then her heart
i dug a shallow grave that day
i didn't even know the dogs name
i could have watched her closer
but i let her go
coming from the nieghbours
she ran onto the road
i can tell her master's mad
sad
stupid dog

Submitted on 2005-10-02 21:34:44 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  really the only thing poetic about this was the rhyme...funny how right MyX was in ur journal entry. in any case I find humor in alot of writes...this is not one of them...this was unoriginal and frankly not amusing or much of anything...and here I thought the only thing you needed to stop was forum...how mistaken I was. are you going to post this somewhere else on your front page too? go the [censored] ahead
~silent
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  YOU MURDERER... you let the car kill Lassie you murdered... Oh my god how am I supposed to make fun of dogs that are not mine now? You destroyed the motivation of my dog jokes and my line that says "We from a purer breed than Lassie" ... Eh it was a good descriptive poem which ended on the dog getting ran over and dying... at first I thought you were talking about a person but as I read on I figured it was a dog since it was so well put on that last line... This is a funny poem like a super funny poem... You did not even know the dogs name I mean really and then you were taking care of the dog ja ja ja you got a gift man

Jose J. Ortiz aka Josyman
| Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
  Great write. Nice flow. Your going to be famous some day. Rhythm is nice.Beautifully done. Thanks for all your comments on my work. It so appreciated. NOT!
| Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by Tarwen Nevle | [ Reply to This ]
  Great write. Nice flow. Your going to be famous some day. Rhythm is nice.Beautifully done. Thanks for all your comments on my work. It so appreciated. NOT!
| Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by Tarwen Nevle | [ Reply to This ]

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