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    dots Submission Name: Establishing my rankingdots
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    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 2083
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       yeah this is fo all the people that hold me back sayin i cant write or i cant do this or that get the middle finger homie and to all you and hatin people i love yall ~1~


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    dotsEstablishing my rankingdots
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    In this lyrical jumble of word from my mind
    I am establishing my rank at this day and time
    I will not be your work in the field nigga or person you bash
    And if u want a battle then our brains can clash
    But i dont need a beat because i got the metal instrumental
    And i going to show you what your word and hate got you into
    Cause my word fire lead words that spray like a mac 10
    And my flow will give you a cerebral orgasm and my pen
    Bleeds lyrical matter into ur eye sand your ears
    And in turn my flow flows out of your rear
    Because yall dont fell the heavy knowledge that im giving you
    But yet my rank as writer and as a poet is long overdue
    And still yall use me as an example
    So in order to deal with u my hands are full
    Full with hate from u haters that one day will have hater kids
    And my tear have dropped on the page and formed words like a car creates skids
    But I dont skid because my drive stay in fifth gear
    So like diddy said u need to pick up the brand new flava in ya ear
    So no longer will u hold my back with your chain of words
    Because is this poem I WILL FINALLY BE HEARD
    ~1~




    Submitted on 2005-10-02 23:23:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is sick yo! And I mean that in a good way. I love hearing youths from my home town spit some wise words. Because lately people have been looking down on us N.O. folks as if were are an inferior being, which just adds to the whole stereotype of black people. But anyways bruh, I am feelin' the poem! Keep yo head up and your pen writing! Peace!
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by L.i. | [ Reply to This ]
      You established your damn ranking/
    So feel good cause at least one know you not fakeing/
    and when you lay your head down tonight/
    understand that your rymes are tight/
    but what else can you expect from dark side/
    you reping big for N.O. or anywhere else you reside.

    good rap killa

    Duece,
    robbin hood
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by Robbing Hood | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the poem itself. youve got a nice writing style. i love the last line. who exactly is the poem sent out to? you might want to be more specific because from where im standing it looks like there no real reasn for it. like youre just mad at people in general because you think they dont like you.

    ps you should read bronx masquerade you remind me of one of the characters!
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      chaz think he cold. he think he gotta a lil skill. this was tight big c. it was kinda like a battle rap and at the same time it was like u was just telling people about ur skill and not to [censored] with u.
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by young p | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey this really threw the word out there! i liked it alot and it really shows yourinto your lyrics. o and my word for a "cerebral orgasm" is Joygasm. you can use it if you want!lol!this was nice!

    XxXsuicidalxxChildXxX
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      lyrics so heavy crushing bjtches
    and hating snitches
    shoot hating broads in the face with AKs
    cut em with razor blades
    and explode em with rocket propelled grenades
    point, aim, squeeze the trigga
    cuz now it's our time my ni99a
    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay... well... I hear ya...or read ya w/e. I think... nvm I forgot what i was gonna say. But anywayz your "lyrical jumble" was off da damn chains. Go heavy!
    | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]


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