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    dots Submission Name: Trust: This Child's Fortunedots
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    Author: inkonspikuous
    ASL Info:    21/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    5.94 - 76/74/26
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Description? relationship btw. mother and child. cant say i know where this come from just kinda sprang out..tell me what ya think...


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    dotsTrust: This Child's Fortunedots
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    Once straight bed sheets
    ruffle to the capricious footwork
    of the carefree baby that wont hesitate to leap
    because mommy will catch them.

    Crushed dandelions mark the spot
    where this child has the mishap
    of falling over hidden stones.
    But, bruised and aching they run over to mom
    because, well, she can make it better.

    Burning tears of anger singe the cheeks
    branding the child into adolesence,
    where nothing makes sense.
    But, no need to fear
    the tears will subside and lose their heat
    as mom's cool hands wipe them away.
    One hug from her will help keep them steady
    through the rocky roads ahead.

    Decisions wih consequences
    that threathen to last forever
    trod on the maturity of the now emerging adult,
    weary they turn to mom whose wisdom is everflowing
    and she explains that while they have
    to make their own way she will always be there.
    There wont be a time that they will leap
    and she wont be there to catch them.
    There doesnt exist a bruise
    she wont help them with. Hugs are free.
    And as long as her spirit breathes
    no wrong turn will ever condemn her child to forever.




    Submitted on 2005-10-03 10:13:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can relate very strongly to your poem
    i am an only son
    i love my mom more then anything in the world
    i will never love another as much as i love her
    she has sacrificed so much for her children i could never explain it all
    thanks for sharing this poem it was deep right to the point and beautiful
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi,

    I can relate to your write...I too have a daughter. I'm always here for her and will always comfort her when in need no matter what. She's grown but she and my son are still my "babies". Your poem is a beautiful touching piece. I really enjoyed the 3rd stanza. A good write, take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      I am a sucker for child to parent poems. Mothers can make the world better with just that knowing smile or by just a lite touch so tender that only a mother can master it.
    This is a nice tribute to the mothers of the world and to your own. I like this so much that it will be added to my fav's.

    This sort of runs along the same lines as a couple of mine do. "Time to go" is one I've written to daughter.

    I read alot of poems here on this forum and few touch my heart. This has!

    Great write

    With admiration

    Wisdom Seeker
    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]


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