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    dots Submission Name: the real title wont fit...dots

    Author: kma12790
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 28/41/18
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       What If I Like Your Second Guessing
    (yes this is the title becuase it wouldnt fit in the designated "title text box")

    as with most of my poems i like throwing in lines and rhythms that dont seem constant with the rest of the poem...just my ecclectic/ADD side showing through, i guess--"What if i like your second guessing" is about secret unadulterated passion, not necessary unrequited love, but "love from a distance"--the all consuming power of a "secret crush" and the trials and tribulations that both parties must endure until courage, random acts of sex, or the dreaded "i meet someone else" line comes along

    (and yes, if you haven't guessed, i have a slight obsession with using quotation marks)

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    dotsthe real title wont fit...dots

    passion that delves far deeper than love
    accidental touches with purpose or lack thereof

    aching constant like stars in the sky
    longing of certainty with doubt i can hide
    of reciprocity of your dreams with me inside

    i pray for glass slippers, with you as my king
    my yearning, like sin, is all consuming

    fate be the day that your desire confirmed
    fool i am not, though this waiting has burned

    Submitted on 2005-10-03 14:35:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Meh! I love it! To me it's a little rough, but that makes it good! It shows how passionate and traitorous love is. It sounds good this way. It's true to the topic.

    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't like it. To me, it is too metallic. Like someone doing the robot. Like you etched the words in forcefully. But that is just me. No hard feelings.
    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by disillusion | [ Reply to This ]

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