:) A sentimental feeling inside is what i feel here. Its such a good piece, but a sad story. To which I am sure alot of people can (dreaded word)> 'relate' < to. That is what makes a good piece though, as every person that reads it has their own personal thoughts about it, be it good or bad, they are all relating and responding to it, is that not what a poet craves? I won't waste your time by putting up here little snippets of your work, because you wrote them, and me saying what I thought worked well doesn't, honestly, matter. Instead be happy that I found truth, meaning and a deep justification into what your words were saying. Thank you for that.
It was good. I don't know though, It left em unsatisfied for some reason. I t is written very well, it has a good rythym, and it has emotion, but it, it lacks something. Hmmm, I don't know, but it's just missing something.
I almost let my soul drift away from me Was almost blinded by your words but now I'm able to see I love this part. Really Sound like something i ONCE SAID. I bet alot of people have said that. your able to realte and remind people that is good.
I really liked this piece and im going through the same sort of thing right now im my life, so i feel what you're going through and i hope that everything works out for you in the end. But about the poem excellent job on it very well written good luck