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Back in time, be great *sigh*


Author: Wolfeye_666
ASL Info:    14/M/Canada
Elite Ratio:    6.53 - 140 /112 /21
Words: 54
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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I'm puzzled and in a corner, so until then, im lost


Back in time, be great *sigh*


Disappearing back in time?
I wish I could,
Be with my cherished ones,
And still be glad,
And not puzzled,
Everything ideal,
Being at your side,
You understanding me,
Me understanding you,
The ideal world,
Will it ever occur?
I wish,
But until then,
I’ll be in a little spot,
Trying to forget you,




Submitted on 2005-10-03 19:19:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yea.. going back in time would be fun ^.^ but those little mistakes we make cannot be changed.. unless we correct them. Rymme is always good in a poem to keep us readers reading. it soothens the rythem and makes it more interesting. good luck :P

-J
| Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Venom | [ Reply to This ]
  wow ubsessed with someone much haha joke it was good nice flow and rythem and wording keep up the good work.

Love, Serinity Blade
| Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]


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