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    dots Submission Name: Clues at the scenedots
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    Author: Unicrom
    ASL Info:    30/m/pacific northwest
    Elite Ratio:    4.81 - 116/71/110
    Words: 643
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    Description:
       Fun, games and festivites were only the begining of a long night for the girls.

    Caught up in their activites they spaced out the time. They are caught off gaurd and quickly jump into their investigation.


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    dotsClues at the scenedots
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    The winter months of England meant longer nights and shorter days. Before any one had realized it dusk had come and gone.

    Life at the Brooksfield tavern was filled with spirits, the cheerful shouts of the patrons and karaoke. The next song that was selected and displayed boldly on the marquee was ‘Aria’ By the Delirium and the Medieval babes.

    Karaoke was this strange phenomenon that strangely enough drew all kinds of intoxicated people together in song. Rei found it amusing to see some of these people that could barely even talk would stagger up there and begin to perform ancient earth songs like they were some modern day pop star.

    Haruko kept a level head and went up to the center stage like a pop star. Bold and confidently she took the stage. With a grin she snatched the mic from the holder and took a breath.

    The music began to play, Haruko stood tall, she stood calm and with a gleam in her eye she made a mental note to the other girls that they needed to get up and join in for the trio.

    Both Rei and Mamimi were unsure if they were the right girls for the job but they went along with, still as nervous as ever.

    The singing cue began and the three began to sing the melodic tune in an integrated voice pattern.

    Once Rei and Mamimi warmed up to the tune the relaxed a little and the song carried harmoniously through the tavern. The inhabitants smiled and swayed to the tune of the Gaelic hymn.

    When the song ended the crowd stood up clapped and took a swig off their pints.

    Those that were too drunk to stand slammed their mugs on the table chanting “More, more, more.”

    Haruko became swayed in the uproar for more of the same. But it wasn’t until Rei pulled close to her and reminded her of the time. To which she snapped out of her euphoric state and grabbed both of them and slipped out the back way.

    Everyone darted off into the cold wet streets of England after dark meeting over at the grove across the street from the residency inn.

    Out of breath and resting her hands on her knees Mamimi gulped in large amounts of air.

    Again Haruko rode up on her vespa. “What. It’s not like I was going to leave it there.” She replied to the looks she got from everyone when she dismounted from the scooter and parked it in the trees.

    “Ok you’s here’s the game plan. While we were out shopping I looked in the data base. This site is quartered off for an investigation.” Haruko said grimly this whole situation with Quol wasn’t looking good. Haruko being trained as a police officer always prepared herself for the worse.

    The others could feel her anguish as she spoke and were more receptive to supporting her now more than ever.

    “I scanned the police records. We’re going to need some tools.” Haruko unlatched the storage compartment of the Vespa. She pulled out a crowbar and tossed it to Mamimi and collected the interferometer.

    “Ok follow me.” She said as she slipped from shadow to shadow. Before looking at Mamimi.

    ~Now carefully take this crowbar and pry..~ But before she had already competed her train of thought Rei had already went through the wall and unlatched the door.

    Once in side the trio closed the door. “Oh I almost for got that you could do that.” Haruko laughed placing her hand over her face to hide her shame.




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