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    dots Submission Name: Friends Is All Well Ever Bedots

    Author: miss__smiles
    ASL Info:    16/f/Soo, Ont
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 117/110/20
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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       I've written pieces about being told I was "just a friend," but this one is from the friend point of view. It's about three bests friends, and two of them realizing there was more than friendship. The "him" referres to the boyfriend, whereas the poem is talking to the third friend.

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    dotsFriends Is All Well Ever Bedots

    Friends Is All Well Ever Be:

    Ive finally told you how I feel,
    I truly love you, this is real.
    But you know we can never be,
    Were friends, but thats all to me.
    Time told me, one thing true,
    How much I care about us, about you.
    But I told him I loved him
    Jumping into something.
    The three musketeer forever
    No matter what, were together.
    But I acted on my feelings for him
    Thinking you and me, were only friends.
    I was wrong, you love me too
    Now Im with him, not with you.
    Now its too late for you and me,
    Friends is all well ever be.

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      I so agree with Graeme on that one for all , all for one thing. And all in all this was a intresting read. It took me back in time to a place I have been before. I say careful careful pain is involved somewhere. LOL Any way I am back from the past it is a good read.
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by ThatWasOnceMe | [ Reply to This ]
      If I get any more depressed today I swear it will be in the news tonight at 10... I swear this is so freaking serious... poetry today is either making me cry making me sad or making me wish I could freaking go back in time... I have been through this enough times and I mean both sides of the ball not just the Ooh I chose her over her... no I mean someone chose someone else over me and you know what? It drove me insane... the poetics are all good you know i like them nothing really wrong... but yeah... I think it is really cool how you have done this piece...

    Jose J. Ortiz aka Josyman
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      Bravo my friend! I have officially taken a liking to your writing. this is like freaking uber great! BUT!...I have just to point out something that wasn't horrible or anything but was just a little off and that was on these two parts...

    "But I told him I loved him
    Jumping into something"

    "But I acted on my feelings for him
    Thinking you and me, were only friends"

    those parts just didn't seem right to me for some reason but they aren't anything i say you would need to change. its possibly just me being thrown off or something. but anywho this was great! well done i have no complaints!

    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an amazing poem. You put all of your feelings into it and the reader gets a picture of a situation many of us face-silent love. We love one of our friends more than a friend but they never see it ...Great write!
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by unforgiving05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow good write, I liked how you portrayed your feelings in this it was like a confession of sorts. It sucks that you cant be together but at least you are not allowing this to affect your friendship. Good write.

    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of the Wilco song "We're Just Friends," but that's song has a different mood; it's more of a sarcastic "Yeah right, friends" kind of mood. I think "The three musketeer forever" needs a "s" on musketeer. I don't think you need to work in the "all for one" thing because too many people do that. I think it's fine to just say musketeer without that reference. I like how you put in the third party to give it a twist, Amy
    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty... but kind of sad. I like it a lot though. I forget if I told you before or not, but I like the way you word things. This is very nicely written and the flow is awesome. Excellent job

    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely written, you certainly put the sentiment of the piece out there.
    It's a pity you can't work "all for one" or "one for all" to follow your musketeers reference, it would slot in very well.

    Very good, well done

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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