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    dots Submission Name: Blooddots
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    Author: bkj43
    ASL Info:    22/m/va
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 116/129/72
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 227
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       Just a piece on violence, let me know your thoughts.


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    dotsBlooddots
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    In an instance,
    Words turn to blows;
    Fist raining,
    With fiery passion behind each.

    Eyes fixed on the spectacle...
    Amazed at the brutality,
    The rawness
    Of the competition.

    Animals
    Fighting for a prize
    Held deep within the soul.
    Blood rains.

    A Victor?
    Victims?
    Humility devoures reason,
    A knife sharp as bone is pulled.

    The violation of the skin;
    The rape of the life.
    A crown made of flesh and blood recieved.
    Tears reign.

    Foolish, foolish pride...




    Submitted on 2005-10-04 00:37:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i agree completely with jessa, this is powerful, i also favour the last part too.
    it's amazing how brutal we can be over absolutely nothing. and if we're not directly involved, we are just as bad for being morbidly fascinated with who is getting their butt kicked and how hard! (or is that just me?)
    great stuff. i really am enjoying your writes.
    michelle
    | Posted on 2006-11-12 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a very powerful piece and I enjoyed it quite thoroughly. My favorite part was the last stanza...

    The violation of the skin
    The rape of the life
    A crown made of flesh and blood recieved
    Tears reign

    Foolish, foolish pride...


    That made for a perfect ending. Great job.
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]


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