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Author:	inkonspikuous
ASL Info:	21/f/va
Elite Ratio:	5.94 - 76/74/26
Words:	116

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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i have to apologize in advance for the lack of any punc. it didnt come with any when i wrote it and i was too lazy to do it when i typed...add your own as you wish..tell me what you think it means...because i get the feeling that my interpretation isnt something others will assume in this poem.

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back then conforming to non conformity
meant re-writing fate in free verse
dodging the bullets on the path you chose
making detours through the infamous winds of doubt
and the walls of criticism
taking joy in backing the unjustifiable
to make a mockery of society's slef-righteousness

now, we wait for fate and run to bullets
all the paths lead to one spot
so, there is no need to fight winds and climb walls
joy is defined by how long it takes you to get there

the more creative the path
the less your chance for survival
so with your last breath
be brave, and bless your soul
dare to die before the ink dries

Submitted on 2005-10-04 10:19:58 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think I may be getting the wrong idea from this.
I don't see a wonder of rebellion but rather the opposite.
I see it as a person being forced to take on the role of the rebel in order to carry on his/her art.
To only non-conform because that is what is expected of them.
Should this person die before the ink is dry?
It is not their fight, they are just keeping their work alive.

This is just my interpretation, but it does feel that way sometimes, why can we not just write something mundane, we must push out the boat and say the unsayable just to be heard.

The writing itself was very depictive, the middle stanzahad be almost believing in a charge through enemy fire.
I guess the only thing I can criticise with this is your tiredness somehow made your "slef-righteousness" come undone on the spelling.
| Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by Localfreak | [ Reply to This ]
  A well concieved piece of writing... Beautifully strewn... andamazingly colored... I could almost taste it... which I unfortunately cannot. I like the tone and the atmosphere of your work. The tone alone can make the rhythm and thus no need for the lyrical rhyme that most poets use... The free verse and construction was unique though I, myself saw such works... only I can't remember them...

This work made me feel the risk... the risk of being creative before society's judging and sometimes... blind eyes... that refuses to see... on a view that the writer has placed all his or her dimensions for the betterment of his work... Truly... this work has struck my heart... as I also feel scared... but I believe you don't because it is clearly stated that you can take on the risk that society eyes to criticize and strip bare the work to standards that aren't the standards of a true work... To rewrite... like to reforge your blade... would engorge the time wasted... and blunder the moment of what was written...

forgive my writing... but it has been since I have written... and ultimately comprehend... any thing...
but all in all... to the core of the matter... your work is...
as straight and as strong as the strongest storm
as fragile and soft as oft of the morn...
eternal as mortal as the deeds of men...
a strength work worth of men of ten... :)

~Ardor Melchezedek~
P.S. I love your work... :) Truly astonishing and beautiful... :)
| Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by Ardor | [ Reply to This ]
  I just couldn't agree more with you. You spoke out in words the passion in my heart. It's time we used every drop of ink we've got

"to make a mockery of society's self-righteousness".

The voice of the poet must once again rattle the society in their hypocrisy and lies. This piece was very nwell conceived and presented. You missed that typo in "self-righteousness".
It's a good piece. Keep up the good work.
| Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by mrpriest | [ Reply to This ]

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