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Submission Name: One chance plz dots

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Author:	Wolfeye_666
ASL Info:	14/M/Canada
Elite Ratio:	6.53 - 140/112/21
Words:	111

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	225
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	735

Description:
I'd like one chance, and plz give it to me, tell me what is disturbing you, I'll always be there at ur side, if you tell me, I will help you 25 hours a day and im serious, and then I'd like one more chance...

One chance plz dots

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I’d like another chance,
But somewhat,
Something is bothering you,
I know your hiding something,
Let it go out,
You’ll be greatly better after,
Tell me what it is,
I can help you,
I’m close by for you,

Then let me improve,
And please grant me another chance,
Cause if you don’t ,
I’ll be miserable,

The reason I’m on Earth,
Is to care for you,
To love you,
And to help you,

So please,
I am asking you,
Only one chance,
Not two,
Just one,
And I’d do ANYTHING for it,
And if you grant it to me,
I’ll be the happiest human being on Earth.

Submitted on 2005-10-04 13:09:51 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was really awesome and again the person you had in mind is very lucky...there wasn't really a flow but oh well it still rocked...I love your stlyle. another faves add:)
*hugs and peace*
jess
| Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  Your unorthodox way of writing poetry impresses me... Again, check for spelling mistakes.
'I know your hiding something' should actually be, 'I know you're hiding something'.
Did you get the one chance? I hope you did, and didn't blow it!
| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem expresses the way you feel tremendously. Truthfully, it shows a lot of heart to express your feelings toward her the way you have. Also I like the word choice and the use of them.
| Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by Booka | [ Reply to This ]
  aww, this is sad.
this girl is LUCKY!!! i wish some guy would be willing to do that for me.

you always put your heart into everything you & thats what i love about it. this is no exception.
it has that pure & innocent love in it. the one we all look for. these are so real, you wrote them out just how you felt them.
it remindes me that maybe we should go back to the basics.

as i said before, this girl is lucky, i hope she sees that.
keep smiling my friend, it will get better, it always does
~jennifer
| Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
  its interesting. maybe you should give who ever you are talking about some space? YOu might want to make it a little shorter though
| Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by sweetme16 | [ Reply to This ]

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