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    dots Submission Name: Cloud no Visiondots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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       Looking at the sunset ~ amazing how the skies change, not just in color but in contrast of the seasons. I felt as though I were praying in the most sacred church of All.

    (played with formatting again...this piece was handwritten/drawn with the words making a dome and arrow. Left-handed!)

    Love,Peace,Joy!!! tif

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    dotsCloud no Visiondots

    A Dome of Clouds
    Cathedral Tall
    Red of Fall

    Winter's bare
    and darkened


    The many seasons
    & cycles


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      This is a lovely prose. You capture nature very well with your words and your form is neat too. It adds personality to your words. The sunset is always beautiful and I like the description here of the cathedral in the sky from the cloud formation. That is cool and gave me some nice imagery! Very well written and expressed. Always enjoy your nature poems. Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Tellow... is that like a mixture of tangerine and yellow?!... this is a soothing musepiphany! your appreciation and love of nature always shines through, we are kindred souls i think in that way.. i love the reference of the clouds like the dome of a cathedral.. beautiful! i was a bit confused by the title though, 'cause your vision seems perfect even with the clouds about and around!

    how's the arm/wrist doing?

    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      As always I love it! You really have a way with abstract poetry. You have a wonderful way of making it visual on different levels. Genius. Fav of course.
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by Tarwen Nevle | [ Reply to This ]
      i like to see different types of creativity
    no matter how short this is.the first part is an attention graber.this is nicely done.you made me want more=give it to me baby(lol)

    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      A dome of clouds cathedral tall
    Saint Andrew - Peter - Mark & Paul
    Beckon me to praise the lord
    And marvel at the written word.

    I am rambling again. I LOVE making shapes from clouds and your cathedral in the sky really set my imagination off on a tangent. Hence my little effort above. Great write fair maid.
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiffelicious, of all your "form" bits, this one worked the best for me.

    A wonderful addition to the plethera of Autumn poems st the moment, it can hold its head up, I'd like to see it done in a graphics program like Print Shop.

    Neat, Tiff, really neat.

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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