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Cold


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 86
Class/Type: Poetry /Cutting or Mutilation
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Just so you guys know.....I DO NOT CUT ANYMORE. whew. I wrote that last month when i was in the process of quiting.......that's why there is that whole.....you have to read it to see.


Cold



Its cold where i've been
colder where i'm going
the agony is deep
the pain finally showing
the blood now mixed
with dripping rain
the razor slips
and i'm in pain
the line across my wrist
is stained in red
afraid to let go
and afraid to go ahead
my secrets want
what they can't have
please hear me now
i'm going mad
it's warm where i've been
but not warmer where i'm going
so please pray for me
cause now my blood is flowing




Submitted on 2005-10-04 14:11:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  nice...i used to cut aswell... but i nver did it for the escapism... i was always into it because it turned me on. dunno why... maybe just the adrinaline. either or... i liked you piece, as it had a good, solid rhyme. the caidence seemed just a hair off, but that's cool. maybe it should be off... the end, though....feels abrupt. (not to be too insulting) sounds sorta like high school homework...just cut off there to get it over with. all in all a well writen piece... not some thing to show off to everyone (and definately not to the men in the white suits), but still worthy of pride.
| Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by DontSaveMySoul | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice job! I've been a cutter at one point, and I've depressed on and off for my entire life. I understand the feeling. It's hard to stop too, and I have to congradualte you for actually being able to do it before it was too late! As for the poem, it's alright. It would probably be better a little longer. I loved the way you started it/ended it. The first four/last lines are my favorite.
| Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by miss__smiles | [ Reply to This ]
  this is pretty good! i dont really understand why no one commented on this! its good im glad u dont cut anymroe neitheri do i ! good job!
~akaila evonne~
| Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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