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    dots Submission Name: Tuesday, July 19thdots
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    Author: emo-tastic
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 571/566/128
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTuesday, July 19thdots
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    Ice-cream store
    front porch, after
    hours.
    Lightening strikes sideways
    as he attempts to capture
    a moment.

    The rain’s so thick that
    the lines on the road
    are invisible.
    and all we see are our fears
    or inhibitions un-ventured.

    I embrace the moment
    and am aware that my
    thoughts are clichéd.

    Lying in the dark,
    getting soaked,
    in a summer
    storm
    is all I could have hoped for.

    Back on the porch, however, they
    contemplate how
    frighteningly close
    their dreams are
    (and for one how
    frighteningly far away).

    All let themselves forget
    (in the endured silence
    of the summer
    storm)
    that they are preparing
    to sacrifice the care-free
    midnights,
    that I’ve only just
    learned
    to love.





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