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Waits on Death

Author: thesacredone
ASL Info:    18/F/BK
Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 139 /159 /50
Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Waits on Death

The clocks deafened her.
She stared them down.
Showing her time
Wasn’t slowing down.
As she looked out her window,
And stared at the rain,
Each solitary drop,
Slid down the window pane,
Fate struck her in the face,
And she gasped at the thought,
Here by this window,
Her body would rot…
Her mind would decay,
And with it, sweet memory.
At the thought of this, she cried,
This was her life to be….
She waits there for her life,
To end with a last breath,
Unable to run from it,
Here she waits on death.

Submitted on 2005-10-04 15:44:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i love this. i dont really know what it is but the wording gives me this sad picture of a girl sitting by her window and the rain rolls down the window tears roll down her face...
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