This poem was great, dawg. You used to right words to express your anger. And I understand that, because I dont' have much rage, but when it does arrive, I do feel like I have this voice in my ears that's just powering it up. Good job, dawg.
This is a good poem. It is short and very direct. Summed up very nicely with the final line. You speak of such feelings that are so difficult to deal with and the frustration that can be so overwhelming. So much anger inside yet no where for it to go. Writing it in a poem is a great place to put it! It is a healthy release and provides a place for reflection. I know this feeling and it is quite unsettling. Just gives me the image of someone pacing hastily around the room not knowing what to do with himself. Very good expression here! Take care!
I liked the poem. I've gotten the real feeling of teenage angst here. One thing: the last stanza bothered me a bit. It's just me, but I don;t think you should tell the reader what they are about to here. Suprise them through a more creative way.
That's a good point... the last line just kind of pulled it all together. Very lovely. I have a terribly large amount of rage inside... but I control myself very well I've just gotten good at pretending things dont bother me. I agree with that other comment that says you have good rhyming skills... you really do. ...Quite impressive... As always, excellent job
Wow, that was a great piece. I'm just lost for words. I've always wondered what it is that drives my rage and makes me angry, but I think you've explained it perfectly.
I love this stanza: "Now what is it That drives the gears That little voice Inside your ears" It's well written. It's like you're hinting at a secret you know, but aren't going to tell us. It was also a great way to open the poem. The last stanza was good. It just seemed like the best way to finish off your poem. Great write! ~Kriss
Ahh yes I can really relate. I've had a lot of rage myself lately thanks to people who are driving me completely insane and my friend just called me a while ago and has given me an even worse temper. So right now I'm in a process of recovering from my anger. LOL. So yea great write that I could relate to. Just hope not everyone else can relate right now like me. LOL. No complaints that I can think of. Nicely done.