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    dots Submission Name: The sinners epiphanydots

    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe sinners epiphanydots

    I think you washed my sins away
    that day you took my hand.
    Bathed me your black waters
    colored me with sand.
    Beg of you to understand
    estimate and plan
    the truth you are
    my only keeper if I
    fall away;
    I can not find the pieces
    I trust in you to put me back
    together, redefine my reasons
    I think you washed my sins away
    that day not long ago
    told me all those stories
    tauht me how to let go.
    Colored me with sand.
    Made me feel the promise of our
    blood stained land
    bathed me in your black waters
    and gave t me a second chance
    gave me all that I need
    I juts hope this epiphany last

    Submitted on 2005-10-04 18:53:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i dontreally get morbid from this.but thats what i like about different perspectives=everyone has one(lol).
    any ways,this was very creative.i also enjoyed reading it.all of it describes a comming to=a realization of the truest kind,an awarness not everyone shares=an epiphany.some of it rymed,some didnt,this dosent matter i still enjoyed the format and what you were saying.i think the message was nice

    all one persons opinion

    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      very morbid which i think adds to the interest value of this piece!
    also interesting how you related the word "epiphany" to the poem ,as thats something holy and pure ,whereas the references throughout are to darkness
    very cool
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by darkme | [ Reply to This ]

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