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    dots Submission Name: bleeding my souldots

    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 833
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I wrote this poem for my friend that I had a crush on and they didn't like me in that way . So the bleeding my soul came about when this friend told me that they didn't like me in a boy friend girlfriend way but just as friends I was realy hurt but that . I hope that you liked this one because I have many others .

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    dotsbleeding my souldots

    I feeel as if my world has vanished and
    I've fallen into a trap set by my love for you
    A love that I know will never be returned because you hate me , I realy didn't plan on falling in love with you . At first I saw you as a friend with a lot of compassion but now I'm bleeding my soul and writting this for you .
    I am growing weak ,my blood is flowing out of control, so is my soul. Before I die I want to tell you that I love you. I am burning up inside, about to die I need to hear you say three little words . As I hover between life and death I hear you say you don't know how much I love you . I was bleeding your soul so you could be pure and ture . But now your soul is as pure and as free as can be .

    Submitted on 2005-10-04 18:56:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thats pure and solid, in general, what was written was deep but i was okay with it but tahst just me. it was pretty strong and i like that about it. you have a strong way of putting it in little words which is cool and only some people can do that.

    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      I see that people have voted this poem as a 3, I can't imagine why. There is so much pain in this, so much that I felt it. Don't stop writing because you have potential.
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]

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