Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: bleeding my souldots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 883
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 757



    Description:
       I wrote this poem for my friend that I had a crush on and they didn't like me in that way . So the bleeding my soul came about when this friend told me that they didn't like me in a boy friend girlfriend way but just as friends I was realy hurt but that . I hope that you liked this one because I have many others .


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsbleeding my souldots
    -------------------------------------------


    I feeel as if my world has vanished and
    I've fallen into a trap set by my love for you
    A love that I know will never be returned because you hate me , I realy didn't plan on falling in love with you . At first I saw you as a friend with a lot of compassion but now I'm bleeding my soul and writting this for you .
    I am growing weak ,my blood is flowing out of control, so is my soul. Before I die I want to tell you that I love you. I am burning up inside, about to die I need to hear you say three little words . As I hover between life and death I hear you say you don't know how much I love you . I was bleeding your soul so you could be pure and ture . But now your soul is as pure and as free as can be .




    Submitted on 2005-10-04 18:56:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      thats pure and solid, in general, what was written was deep but i was okay with it but tahst just me. it was pretty strong and i like that about it. you have a strong way of putting it in little words which is cool and only some people can do that.

    -BleedingTears
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      I see that people have voted this poem as a 3, I can't imagine why. There is so much pain in this, so much that I felt it. Don't stop writing because you have potential.
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    76548

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    In the end written by Janesaddiction
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    Incubus written by monad
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Bond written by saartha
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    To written by SavedDragon
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    This written by Chelebel
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    Push written by JanePlane
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry