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    dots Submission Name: Everynight I Didn't (part 2)dots
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    Author: toyysruss
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    dotsEverynight I Didn't (part 2)dots
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    sorrow comes in waves at night
    and i didn't know i was at the ocean
    they say,the moon is responsible
    well,she's my moon.in the light i wish i reflected.
    they say the sun is responsible
    well,mines gone out

    misery hasn't any company at night
    and i didn't know i loved both
    darkness all the time
    where's the sun?
    it has to be there
    the moon still beams

    truly at night,is when it's the scarriest
    and i didn't really ever never ever ever have that feeling before
    i'm still crying everynight
    and i didn't know that a lifeboat could be built of feathers
    real downpours here
    crying for a better material
    stop the water please
    a better material for that life boat

    god i say everynight, except one

    and i didn't know how to
    pray everynight
    only used to when i needed something
    well,i need something now
    a miracle material
    for that fading into the water of a lifeboat

    i'm sorry to say,at night,no more dreams
    because i didn't know true life was but
    no use dreaming
    no use praying
    a miracle in sight,is not
    and that except one
    was the true day,it became the lonliest number
    true darkness became
    i'd be better off on the titanic
    and i've never really known much
    especially at night




    Submitted on 2005-10-04 23:59:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      People only pray when it is somethin' they need, its truely F***** up how we live our lives..as we sin and ask for forgiveness every single time we feel guilty for our actions. But the lord is not the refuge we truely seek; it is the internal peace we psychologicaly obtain when we think we have been heard or forgiven.

    I like your plot.
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]


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