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Everynight I Didn't (part 2)

Author: toyysruss
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Everynight I Didn't (part 2)

sorrow comes in waves at night
and i didn't know i was at the ocean
they say,the moon is responsible
well,she's my the light i wish i reflected.
they say the sun is responsible
well,mines gone out

misery hasn't any company at night
and i didn't know i loved both
darkness all the time
where's the sun?
it has to be there
the moon still beams

truly at night,is when it's the scarriest
and i didn't really ever never ever ever have that feeling before
i'm still crying everynight
and i didn't know that a lifeboat could be built of feathers
real downpours here
crying for a better material
stop the water please
a better material for that life boat

god i say everynight, except one

and i didn't know how to
pray everynight
only used to when i needed something
well,i need something now
a miracle material
for that fading into the water of a lifeboat

i'm sorry to say,at night,no more dreams
because i didn't know true life was but
no use dreaming
no use praying
a miracle in sight,is not
and that except one
was the true day,it became the lonliest number
true darkness became
i'd be better off on the titanic
and i've never really known much
especially at night

Submitted on 2005-10-04 23:59:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  People only pray when it is somethin' they need, its truely F***** up how we live our we sin and ask for forgiveness every single time we feel guilty for our actions. But the lord is not the refuge we truely seek; it is the internal peace we psychologicaly obtain when we think we have been heard or forgiven.

I like your plot.
| Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]

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