Everynight I Didn't (part 1) -------------------------------------------
i cry everynight
and i didn't know i had a waterbed
i cry everynight
and my pillow becomes my lifeboat
i cry everynight
and the sound of the waterfall
finally soothes me to sleep
i pray everynight
and i didn't know i was religious
i pray everynight
that he will plug that hole
i pray everynight
that i can find that hole in the pillow
i finally dream everynight
and i didn't know what a nightmare was
i dream everynight
and in my nightmares,there are no bad men
i dream everynight
but there is one last big fight
i dream everynight
and that nightmare becomes my reality
and everynight i cry,pray,and dream
the hole becomes bigger
unable to plug that pillow any longer
and i didn't know
that my bed would become my tomb
i dont hitnk i quite got it yet, but i am kinda preoccupied right now. one thing i got that i liked about it was the picture of drowning in your tears, but theres so many its like you ahve a waterbed, etc. I liked that about it, I never thought about it like that: crying yourself to sleep and theres that many tears. thats what i got anyways, i dont know if thats what you meant but i like my version of it! but tell me if im wrong, i really would like to know the truth behind it. ~Danielle~
something a little different from you interesting topic and story line sounds like a lonely person caught up in a dream of sinking into the unknown very well witten and keeps the reader saying hmmm sandman
this one's kinda depressing. i liked it though. it seemed like u were "drowning" in more than your tears. nightmares and your own personal demons. u just look to religion to help u overcome ur problems. that's what i got out of it
What is it about this poem that caused you to write it? If this were me I would have put this poem under the class of depressed. Overall though it was a good write.
Submission Name: Everynight I Didn't (part 1)
