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    dots Submission Name: Everynight I Didn't (part 1)dots

    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsEverynight I Didn't (part 1)dots

    i cry everynight
    and i didn't know i had a waterbed
    i cry everynight
    and my pillow becomes my lifeboat
    i cry everynight
    and the sound of the waterfall
    finally soothes me to sleep

    i pray everynight
    and i didn't know i was religious
    i pray everynight
    that he will plug that hole
    i pray everynight
    that i can find that hole in the pillow

    i finally dream everynight
    and i didn't know what a nightmare was
    i dream everynight
    and in my nightmares,there are no bad men
    i dream everynight
    but there is one last big fight
    i dream everynight
    and that nightmare becomes my reality

    and everynight i cry,pray,and dream
    the hole becomes bigger
    unable to plug that pillow any longer
    and i didn't know
    that my bed would become my tomb

    Submitted on 2005-10-05 00:00:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i dont hitnk i quite got it yet, but i am kinda preoccupied right now. one thing i got that i liked about it was the picture of drowning in your tears, but theres so many its like you ahve a waterbed, etc. I liked that about it, I never thought about it like that: crying yourself to sleep and theres that many tears. thats what i got anyways, i dont know if thats what you meant but i like my version of it! but tell me if im wrong, i really would like to know the truth behind it.
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by 15yearsemotion | [ Reply to This ]
      something a little different from you
    interesting topic and story line sounds like a lonely person caught up in a dream of sinking into the unknown very well witten and keeps the reader saying hmmm
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      this one's kinda depressing. i liked it though. it seemed like u were "drowning" in more than your tears. nightmares and your own personal demons. u just look to religion to help u overcome ur problems. that's what i got out of it
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      What is it about this poem that caused you to write it?
    If this were me I would have put this poem under the class of depressed.
    Overall though it was a good write.
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]

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