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    dots Submission Name: Will our love last?dots
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    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Feed back on everything that you think is needed and what could have been done better to make this a better writing and give me what this poem makes you think of and how it makes you feel.

    I wrote this when thinking of my girlfriend at home.


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    dotsWill our love last?dots
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    Will it last even after all the times,
    we've laughed and cried together
    Things kept secret and things,
    shared our to be kept between us

    My eyes that show the burning passion
    for you even more than words can say
    The touch of your body up against mine
    the feeling you give me seeing you from
    day to day

    Our eyes meet not knowing
    what to say to each other in words
    The love we share is like a mother
    bird trying to teach her baby how to fly

    Will our love last even after we
    have shared all that we have to offer
    The fire that is burning to get to
    know you better inside and out

    Will our love last even after we have passed on... that decision resides deep within inside yourself?




    Submitted on 2005-10-05 06:30:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You know I like love and I am a strong believer that it can last and endure all things and everything. I think that this poem really puts the question out there, it doubts love and questions love and I think people need that to remind them what it is.

    Jaz
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Love is responded to by the face of presence, loyalty, and respect. Love can go as easy as it comes... we all cant always get what we want.

    Whats important to remember is that you can keep what you want forever, as long as you put forth the effort, because love doesnt just land on your lap.

    P.S. you can never say you really know a person because looks and talk may be deceiving.
    You need to incorprate the REAL DEAL so that people can get a feel of what the world
    IS REALLY LIKE!.
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]


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