Description: Feed back on everything that you think is needed and what could have been done better to make this a better writing and give me what this poem makes you think of and how it makes you feel.
I wrote this when thinking of my girlfriend at home.
Will our love last? -------------------------------------------
Will it last even after all the times,
we've laughed and cried together
Things kept secret and things,
shared our to be kept between us
My eyes that show the burning passion
for you even more than words can say
The touch of your body up against mine
the feeling you give me seeing you from
day to day
Our eyes meet not knowing
what to say to each other in words
The love we share is like a mother
bird trying to teach her baby how to fly
Will our love last even after we
have shared all that we have to offer
The fire that is burning to get to
know you better inside and out
Will our love last even after we have passed on... that decision resides deep within inside yourself?
You know I like love and I am a strong believer that it can last and endure all things and everything. I think that this poem really puts the question out there, it doubts love and questions love and I think people need that to remind them what it is.