Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Everlastingdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: secretdream0
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 48/46/22
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 865
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 507



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsEverlastingdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Take one last look
    At those chocolate brown eyes.
    Take one last comfort
    In his loving arms.
    Take one last moment
    To breathe him in.
    Take one last time
    To listen to his soothing voice.
    Take one last second
    To kiss him good-bye.
    Take this one last night
    And cherish it forever.
    Take your lasting memories
    And store it deep in your heart.
    For there awaits another
    To look foward to his everlasting lies.




    Submitted on 2005-10-05 07:54:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Ok im going through the same exact situtation right now im my life so i know exactly what you're feeling, and i think that you did a really good job on writing about it. My favorite part of the part with the comforting arms because when you are in love with someone the safest part to be is in their arms.
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]
      the way the 2nd and last line related is blinding ,almost allows me to picture the person who inspired this work.
    what exactly are the last two lines saying? is it a cynical outlook on future relationships??

    a good read ^.^ cool stuff
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by darkme | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    76602

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry