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    dots Submission Name: Everlastingdots

    Author: secretdream0
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 48/46/22
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Take one last look
    At those chocolate brown eyes.
    Take one last comfort
    In his loving arms.
    Take one last moment
    To breathe him in.
    Take one last time
    To listen to his soothing voice.
    Take one last second
    To kiss him good-bye.
    Take this one last night
    And cherish it forever.
    Take your lasting memories
    And store it deep in your heart.
    For there awaits another
    To look foward to his everlasting lies.

    Submitted on 2005-10-05 07:54:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ok im going through the same exact situtation right now im my life so i know exactly what you're feeling, and i think that you did a really good job on writing about it. My favorite part of the part with the comforting arms because when you are in love with someone the safest part to be is in their arms.
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]
      the way the 2nd and last line related is blinding ,almost allows me to picture the person who inspired this work.
    what exactly are the last two lines saying? is it a cynical outlook on future relationships??

    a good read ^.^ cool stuff
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by darkme | [ Reply to This ]

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