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news of the world

Author: sickly
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Words: 105
Class/Type: Lyrics /Gothic
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news of the world

to the queen,
i can rock you
i am a champion
this heart attack is sheer
leaving all dead
of spreaded wings
fighting from the inside

get down
make love
no sleeping on the sidewalk
who needs you?
it's late
blue and melancholy

stories about long ago
now years on
turn to me
but not tonight
words can be hard
i'll hear about it later

i gave you fair warning
the chains are off
the streets are mean
mercy is criminal
off with their heads
burned by the wind

the dancer
and the madman
across the ocean
to be free

Submitted on 2005-10-05 09:54:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  odd... no real form to it... just clips and phrases rearanged into some meloncholly form of a poem. sounds almost distressed, as though writen in an asylum, or spoken within the final throws of a manic life. well done.
| Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by DontSaveMySoul | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this, it's got this angry feeling, while still somehow being melancholic, but in a good way. it's a neat style, and it fits the words really well. Nice work.

Cheers, Azael
| Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by Anticlownperson | [ Reply to This ]
  this was great some old rock wods from good musicians vey well put togethe i got to hand it to you on this one
thanx for your comment on untitled not sue your meaning though i have alwaz admired the good and evil of the unknown as far as the jews go i remembe their history was slaughtered by the germans
i think we all have an unrested spirit within ourself some may never find it where i have been on deaths door 3 times in my life
and that is why i can write the way i do
thanx and good luck to you as well
| Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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