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    dots Submission Name: news of the worlddots
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    Author: sickly
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 545/537/203
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Gothic
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    dotsnews of the worlddots
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    to the queen,
    i can rock you
    i am a champion
    this heart attack is sheer
    leaving all dead
    of spreaded wings
    fighting from the inside

    get down
    make love
    no sleeping on the sidewalk
    who needs you?
    it's late
    blue and melancholy

    stories about long ago
    now years on
    turn to me
    but not tonight
    sorry
    words can be hard
    i'll hear about it later

    i gave you fair warning
    the chains are off
    the streets are mean
    mercy is criminal
    off with their heads
    burned by the wind

    the dancer
    and the madman
    across the ocean
    to be free




    Submitted on 2005-10-05 09:54:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      odd... no real form to it... just clips and phrases rearanged into some meloncholly form of a poem. sounds almost distressed, as though writen in an asylum, or spoken within the final throws of a manic life. well done.
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by DontSaveMySoul | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this, it's got this angry feeling, while still somehow being melancholic, but in a good way. it's a neat style, and it fits the words really well. Nice work.

    Cheers, Azael
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by Anticlownperson | [ Reply to This ]
      this was great some old rock wods from good musicians vey well put togethe i got to hand it to you on this one
    thanx for your comment on untitled not sue your meaning though i have alwaz admired the good and evil of the unknown as far as the jews go i remembe their history was slaughtered by the germans
    i think we all have an unrested spirit within ourself some may never find it where i have been on deaths door 3 times in my life
    and that is why i can write the way i do
    thanx and good luck to you as well
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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