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    dots Submission Name: On The Other Sidedots
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    Author: Munchie_1226
    ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831/1834/185
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I know...the mirror thing....done many times...blah blah blah....but...hopefully I can pull it off....

    *crosses fingers*

    I was sitting in my living room last night...and I have a mirror sitting on the floor...and I just wondered...what if it was like Alice in Wonderland or something...and the girl on the other side of this mirror really existed in another world......


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    dotsOn The Other Sidedots
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    This girl in the glass...
    That I see....
    What if she were someone else...
    And not really me..

    As though she were there...
    The same time as I.
    Yet thought it was herself...
    As she passes by.

    Does she see the beauty...
    Of her eyes, lips, and hair...
    For these are the qualities...
    That her and I share..

    Everytime I see her..
    I can't help but question her role.
    Is her life similar to mine?
    Do we share the same soul?

    Does she walk each day...
    Proud of who she is?
    Does she also choose not to take...
    As much as she gives?

    Each morning, day, and night...
    She is there...
    Standing on the other side of the glass...
    As I stare...




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      I thought I was the only person who had this crazy thought! LOL Yeah the mirror thing has been done time and time again but this was slightly different form the rest I have read. To actually question if there is another world on the other side of the mirror can provoke deep thought...It was not the best piece but it was good...

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    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed the idea of it, however I think the wording, and the rhyming, and the line length kinda messed up the flow. Other than that, it was a great piece of work. The meaning behind the words is great.
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by miss__smiles | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is tricky. It makes the reader think about how a person can see themselves differently than other people do. It opens everyones eyes to the fact that no matter how hard we try, we will always wish that somehow we were different. The wording I think is what makes it a little confusing on what you're trying to convey but other than that a good write!
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by unforgiving05 | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm. made me think and that was what i needed at this point tonight.. i really enjoyed it because of the different view you took.. you dont see many pieces being wrote with this type of thought and ideas you had behind it.. the first two stanzas caught my attention... and i know im not the only one who thinks this way.. good job again

    im glad to see you are back to your old self
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely done, Li Li, very well put.

    The questions everybody has, really, about their real self...amI?...can I?...will I?...

    I really enjoyed this slightly narcissistic take on it, very well done!

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a great write. That would be so awesome to be what the reflection in the mirror sees as the reflection. This was some interesting stuff to contemplate...many have done it, but haven't really gone in the direction that you have. I really liked how you posed your questions and expressed your wonderment. You most definitely pulled it off as far as I'm concerned. Thanks for sharing...I'm gonna be watching my every move now whenever I pass by a mirror, just in case it's my reflection that's watching me!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      I am biased too, but I think you did it as well. Very neat and very, very spiritual in an innermost personal way. I look in the mirror and think about why that guy doesnt look as good as I feel. I think hes got a problem or sumptin', HA!

    I liked this alot Li Li and I think the vision in the mirror is envious of what SHE sees, ya know? Thanks for posting this. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I am going to introduce some knowledge to you... Do you know how far is the next universe from you? Right in front of your face... So wondering if the girl in the mirror is some other person you might be right... you might be right indeed... it is like "The Matrix"... How do you know if what you see is real and not just fabricated by some machine that is running on our heat? How do you know this message is just a part of your imagination? And to finish the questions off... How do you know the person you most care about if you are not seeing anything that the person does?... Pretty fun huh? Yeah I know it is weird but it is so true... and by the way if a tree falls and no one is around to hear it, it does not make a sound beacuse how does anyone knows the tree fell or if it even existed if they were not there? Dropping knowledge... lol good write overall and I enjoyed it

    Jose J. Ortiz aka Josyman
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm biased but i think you pulled it off...

    I liked the door you opened with this...what if it's YOU who are the reflection living on a different side and the reflection is the REAL Li Li...now there's thought to muse on...
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]


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