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    dots Submission Name: Path of Lifedots
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    Author: Desi
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 184/128/30
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 207
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    Description:
       This is a rewrite and new title for an old poem I wrote..


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    dotsPath of Lifedots
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    Shrouded with uncertainty, happiness and dispair.
    The path of life through which we walk can sometimes be unfair.

    Remember this when times are gray and clouds block each new day.
    You have the strength to go on so don't be lead astray.

    Meet each dawn with open arms and never to forget, that there are those who had no choice, their days on earth they left.

    Memories now surround us as we start each new day.
    In time, we shall share eternity, he will lead the way.




    Submitted on 2005-10-05 14:42:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is an interesting poem. The rhythmic structure you've selected is challenging to read and I found myself re-reading the verse. I felt uncomfortable reading it and at the same time I enjoyed the verse. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, just fyi in the 4th line the word "lead" should be "led."
    It's a little cliché, but hey, it's still good. Cool pattern.
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by nothinggold | [ Reply to This ]



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