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    dots Submission Name: Path of Lifedots

    Author: Desi
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 210/151/34
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       This is a rewrite and new title for an old poem I wrote..

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    dotsPath of Lifedots

    Shrouded with uncertainty, happiness and dispair.
    The path of life through which we walk can sometimes be unfair.

    Remember this when times are gray and clouds block each new day.
    You have the strength to go on so don't be led astray.

    Meet each dawn with open arms and never to forget, that there are those who had no choice, their days on earth they left.

    Memories now surround us as we start each new day.
    In time, we shall share eternity, he will lead the way.

    Submitted on 2005-10-05 14:42:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      How quickly the moments pass, and change from events to memories. Your poem is inspiring, with philosophical and encouraging verse.

    Nice work Desi!
    | Posted on 2011-08-05 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an interesting poem. The rhythmic structure you've selected is challenging to read and I found myself re-reading the verse. I felt uncomfortable reading it and at the same time I enjoyed the verse. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, just fyi in the 4th line the word "lead" should be "led."
    It's a little cliché, but hey, it's still good. Cool pattern.
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by nothinggold | [ Reply to This ]

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