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    dots Submission Name: Breed to Breathe (9:00pmEST)dots
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    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       tv is a joke.there is always a hidden meaning in a lot of my writes


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    dotsBreed to Breathe (9:00pmEST)dots
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    I'll be there for you",like the sitcom,
    is a Joke.
    and i've been polite untill now,
    that's 1 2.
    you take away that 1 from the 2,
    and i am Alone.
    what i'm trying to show you is,
    that it's over.
    best "friends" indeed.......
    we all just breed,to breathe
    i say Stop!

    like the sitcom,"Love and Marriage"
    is a joke.
    like the network that played that show,
    Used to be one to.
    and that's the way i'm tired of feeling,
    always being.......
    and then there's the breeding
    here comes the little.......
    there goes the love.
    and if you can't handle it,i say Stop

    now we turn to reality.......
    i say,pleasssee
    "Desperate Houswives" are not more than me.
    what the hell is wrong with all of us,
    i want to breathe
    a sigh of Relief,i tell you,i need some.
    that housewife needs a kick in the ass
    as i suspect the huband does 2
    there's that Number again,
    and ours is up.
    if we don't Stop.

    we need some "Home Improvement",
    that's no Joke
    like the sitcom is,that T.V. has become.
    i'm trying to show you the real Reality,
    it's what you make it.don't breed to feed,
    you're hunger for a Joke.

    We become,the biggest 1 of all.
    this program,dosen't start in the Fall.
    i beg of you not 2
    at last............a friend 1+1

    the new reality show"breed to breathe"
    Plays everynight 9 pm E.S.T.
    as i do




    Submitted on 2005-10-05 16:57:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is so confusing but i liked it.
    there was alot of sarcasm
    and it seemmed bitter
    but in a funny way
    good job :)
    //miss//
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by Its All A Lie | [ Reply to This ]


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