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    dots Submission Name: At the Brinkdots
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    Author: uncreaTED
    Elite Ratio:    4.86 - 58/69/24
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    Description:
       This is a silly spoof or parody that became an extended metaphor that grew into an allegory that . . .

    God bless the Millus Clan.


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    At the Brink

    At the nest's edge, the fledging teeters.
           (a chick no longer; yet not a hen either)

    The quandry; to stay put, or to test virgin wings.
           (Papa Owl wisely holds a 200# test silk thread teether)

    Innate drives compel the biddy to venture off.
           (filial piety courses 'les veines de la poulette')

    Habit, then fear, impel the obedient offspring to remain rooted.
           (the nest is more than security)

    First flight looms like an unwelcomed death wish.
           (gravity's death plummet balances the buoyant updraft adventure of hope)

    Shear insanity to consider a leap of faith from this perch.
           (was there not an express elevator to the ground floor nearby?)

    Perchance the inaugural flight should start from nearer terra firma.
           (getting out of that execrable shell was test enough)

    The fiery eyes of her envious siblings idly scan the timid wench.
           (they'll soon get their chance)

    Hindsight's so much clearer when you lead from the rear.
           (As wisdom seeks another wise old owl to endow)

    Sages were once inept goslings too.
           (Gramp's seeds'll populate the Earth)

    Many broods to educate 'n' forage for in golden years.
           (Eternity awaits all; fair or fowl)

    Devout birds that prey together, flock together!







    Submitted on 2005-10-06 04:14:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ted, you surprise me.

    Metaphoric humor to live by.
    Delightful and funny with a message to boot.
    I can relate to this But I think you already know that. HEHE

    Great piece Ted

    Respect and Admiration

    Wisdom Seeker (Clyde)
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]


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