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    dots Submission Name: kick it up a notch verse 3dots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 667
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1226



    Description:
       last verse. thanx everyone who read any of em


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    dotskick it up a notch verse 3dots
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    worried about your car's special features
    as i release all these creatures
    my demons are outta control
    gotta firm hold on your soul
    not letting go, checking pros with this weapon flow
    bank robbers, fill you with seven holes
    now they grabbing the dough
    police fire in threes before saying freeze
    ur on your knees
    too poor to patch the holes in your jeans
    u don't know what i mean, cuz it seems
    that i left you behind
    with just five lines, this is rhyme time
    crooks design crimes, now your in a bind
    cuz you signed on the dotted line, tryin to find
    what my purpose is
    murder's no longer disturbing kids
    they adapt to their losses
    sitting at home with no water in faucets
    suffering from poverty
    living in broken down property
    with barely a roof over they're head
    sleeping 6 to a bed
    broken down unable to cope, with no soap
    and hope is a luxury
    disgusting me with your indifference
    going the distance
    writing a 16 bar sentence
    even if killas take me out
    turn my music up, let it bump through your house




    Submitted on 2005-10-06 11:57:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is impressive...I'd like a little more elaboration on your line "cuz you signed on the dotted line. trying to find/ what purpose is" but at the same time that was one of my many favorite lines in this one...You have an awesome style and I always find myself on the edge waiting for another of your writes...keep writing:)
    ~Jess
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this man, it's odd I was just talkin to robbing hood (josh hood[a friend of mine]) that I always write the same [censored]...then I come home and check es...and you told me about it...I need to work on some more subjects ... thats abundantly clear as of know...any way... this is good man you have a good style, and I don't care where you live, I am determined to rap with you one day
    Deuce~
    *the aberrant soldier
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i'm impressed... i would like an explanation of your line, "cuz you signed the dotted line, trying to find/what my purpose is" because its not clear, and I have no idea what you mean, unless its justa hip-hop style line... otherwise this is really really good, keep writing and if you can, record it.
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]
      I just got back onto ES so I didn't catch the first 2 verses, are they on your page? When I get a chance I'll check 'em out!
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      If anybody ever takes you out then im a take them out. That line about cops is true to cause they think that because their there to enforce the can break it. like you member on the news way back when when the cops shot that guy cause he was kneeling down and they said he was reaching for a weapon. Again you have managed to come up with another good write. keep it up.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2005-10-14 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]


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