Gimme gimme gimme...I want to know..I want to know...
There is a line in this that caught me...
When you sit...do you think of the past or the future...you know...I never really paid attention...I would have to say that I think about the past more...that's not a good thing...I need to forget the past...it's pretty ugly...and when I say pretty ugly...there really isn't anything pretty about it...
Okay this will be interesting. I like it. Yeah, I get to see into the mind of someone else. My fav part: So the journey begins Into the mind of a teen Are you all ready for this? To see the things that I've seen? Okay now I have to go and read the other parts.
This is very intriguing! This is a very well written beginning and leaves the reader wanting more of the story. You begin this poem with lots of questions and they blend it into the beginning of your tale. I am interested to find out where this one goes as you have said this is in fact about you. This has a really good flow to it and the rhyme is good too! I shall await the next part! Nice beginning! Take care!
I'm so intruiged... curious. This is a lovely start to your poem, the writing is very simple but I think it works best like that in a series... makes it easier to digest, you know? The questions and direct speech to the reader are cool, makes you (me, I guess) feel moe involved, which I always like in longer poems. It's sometimes hard to establish a connection with a poet when you can barely understand what they're saying. I'll be eagerly awaiting the next one... x
i like this...its the basic story of a teen...and i think all teens ask those questions at one time or another to someone. i shows lots of emotion and thats always a good thing. good work. god bless. ashley N.D.
I like it, but now I want the rest. I'm interested. I like the part:
"Some will sympathize And some will care not"
I would expand on the many reasons WHY I like it, but I am kind of falling asleep here. Appearantly, I dont sleep at night anymore, but I do durning the day. It's terrible. Anywho... the way you wrote this is good. It starts pulling you in... and then it just stops. Yay I cant wait for the rest. As always... excellent...